|Reviews for Kometto High|
| matte chapter 61 . 3/26/2016
You know, this story was very good even if you never ended it, sadly. I have read it a lot of times in the last many years. But i have to tell you 1 important thing :
You did in my opinion a huge, and i mean it, huge error. You put too many characters into the story and evrything got confusing. Also, too many characters means little development.
You should have used only the original group : Celeste and her sister , Mia and Mai, Sylvia ghost , Yuki (you never developed this interesting kitsune's character...). All the other chareacters should have never become co-protagonist.
You have a well written unfinished story that , in my opinion, is ruined by the huge amount of co-protagonist you forced inside the plot.
If i were you, i would change things from chapter 12. The osiris plant was the first unneeded addition to the main cast.
And i don't mean that you should erase most of your characters. I mean simply that they should become less important so that the main ones ( Celeste and her sister , Mia and Mai, Sylvia ghost , Yuki and Yami) could get a full long and interesting character development.
You should really rewrite this story with these suggestions, i think you will do a even better work than this one.
| Vridragor chapter 1 . 3/31/2014
| Vridragor chapter 1 . 3/31/2014
please continue this too good to be left update
| matte chapter 62 . 9/24/2013
I really like this fiction, i read it like 3-4 times...a pity that it seems it won't see an end.
| Guest chapter 62 . 7/1/2013
I still love reading this story, it's such a great one. I hope you are able to update it again, it is a great piece of fiction.
| Neo Rulez chapter 1 . 9/8/2012
| Auric Seven chapter 62 . 8/25/2012
We waited a long time for this, so if it takes a little while to make it it this good its worth the wait. Though it has been a while, so it is a little frustrating, but if a story is good its worth it. So... quicker update please.
| Guest chapter 1 . 8/24/2012
This story is really detailed and very attention grabbing im going to keep finishing this story because its so good! Also my name is in it so it makes it even funnier!
| Fierce Ookami chapter 62 . 8/24/2012
i dont know any good programs but i do love this story! you are a really good writer and i was excited to see you had updated. i cant wait til the next chapter
| ChaosConnor chapter 1 . 7/4/2012
| Mysterious MD chapter 58 . 6/17/2012
That was a great chapter. It's hard for me to read this story, because I want to save it, so I leave the buffer of a few chapters. That is why my reviews and readings aren't always together. It was an interesting chapter, we get to see him understand how the feelings of Celeste and Sylvia have changed over time due to his interaction with their lives. That was a good concept. I wonder how his relationships will turn out with them. We also see them travel to the city to deal with the issue, I wonder how that will turn out as well. And I'm interested in seeing just what will happen with his demon powers. Below are the spelling/grammar errors I found.
You had; "Like I said, I need you around in case I loose control." where "loose" should be "lose".
You had; "Though they are usually to busy to handle everything." where "to" should be "too".
You had; "My family is run but different siblings, and they all have their different tastes" where I think "but" should be "by".
"Sylvia you did the impossible, Celeste you stayed even when she showed her true power!" That sentence was a bit confusing in terms of wording.
You had; "HE shook his head and sighed again." and "HE stared." where you have the "e" capitalized in "he".
Overall it was a good chapter. Keep up the great writing!
| Mysterious MD chapter 57 . 4/13/2012
That was a great chapter. The only structure part of the story that struck me was that you had all the italics together with no spaces. Otherwise it was a great chapter. We have the Demon Council looking towards bringing in Alec's group, talk of the contracts, human groups, and Kristin. I can't wait to read more, keep up the great writing!
| Fierce Ookami chapter 60 . 3/6/2012
another awesome chapter! cant wait for 61
| Fierce Ookami chapter 59 . 1/18/2012
awesome chapter. i was really excited to see that you updated sooner than normal. can't wait til next chapter!
| Mysterious MD chapter 51 . 1/10/2012
That was another interesting chapter. We get to see a bunch of different things going on there, from the crumbling alliance, to Kain and Lucia's past. We also learn of the Demon Charmers. It was a really interesting chapter. There were a few spelling/word things I encountered.
You had; " "We will not cause you any trouble, but we no long wish to listen to you." Mori stated as she headed towards the exit. " where I think you mean "longer" instead of "long". You also had; " "If you didn't fear this rare breed of human than what happened over a century ago?" Sarah cackled. " where I think you mean "then" rather than "than". You had; " "That was all her could do?" She sighed and lay back on the grass. " where I think you mean "he" rather than "her".
Otherwise there were some spots I wasn't sure on so I didn't comment on those. The biggest other thing I noticed was that it got hard to follow between all the shifts in the POV. It was confusing to tell when you shifted from one story to the other.
Regardless, it was a great chapter, and I can't wait to read the next. Keep up the amazing writing!