Reviews for North Shore High School
Brubolz chapter 8 . 7/28/2019
OOMMGGG THEY ARE SO CUTE.
Brubolz chapter 7 . 7/28/2019
Ooohhh I feel sorry for Ian and his art.
Brubolz chapter 6 . 7/28/2019
Toby is already in love. Thats cute.
Brubolz chapter 5 . 7/28/2019
I hate the jocks. It's to see Toby protecting Ian
Brubolz chapter 4 . 7/28/2019
I like toby reallly much.
Brubolz chapter 3 . 7/28/2019
They are getting more into it. I see the love in the horizon
Brubolz chapter 2 . 7/28/2019
Toby is cute for worring.
Brubolz chapter 1 . 7/28/2019
Really good beggining. I like the more dark theme.
delsana chapter 23 . 1/1/2019
I just realized that I was misreading. It's not the last update on this was 2018 of November, it was the last update of this was 2008 of November.

In effect no one is liking watch this page and there's no way I can get the epilogue... please give me it.

What I anticipate given what I know about the law and such is something more like this:

Ian never gets to even step back in that school, the simple reality is that he pulled out a gun during an assembly and can't readily be trusted now, instead he'll be able to finish his work at home or in some summer school situation elsewhere, graduating without actually being in his place.

Ian's investigation provided every jock doesn't lie about what the other jocks did (which is common bullying defense that avoids consequences) will likely reveal that Trent and the others were significantly bullying him but also inflicted physical assault and battery upon Ian, and due to their actions while he was hunched over and being beaten and kicked, assault with a deadly weapon will be claimed as a charge and the individuals responsible will expelled and arrested or expelled and nothing really more coming to it.

Ian's friends never really ever tried to stop the bullying, report the bullying or do anything about it and I hope he comes to realize that he never really did have any real friends so much as a few distractions that made him not be entirely lonely, other than Toby who was his friend but didn't want to lose his friends as well which was a delicate balancing act. I doubt it'd happen but I'd hope Toby would come to realize that other than dressing strangely and being "weird" that Ian didn't really do anything to draw this attention.

I hope they go to California or something together though I'm not sure how a psychotic break will be looked at in terms of college applications and such. I do hope Toby and Ian become dedicated boyfriends and Toby realizes that Ian does actually still want him and love him, I suspect that happens it's just he's very difficult to get him to be direct.

I suspect we never really understand why adults didn't intervene, his parents didn't really seem to intervene, the brother he had an argument with... whatever that was about, etc. I doubt we ever learn why Toby harassed him as a kid in the first place or whether he realizes who he was as a bully and desires not to be it, etc. It seems other than the teasing and such, the physical stuff really had no excuse.

I do suspect he'll have to go to a mental clinic as ordained by the courts and Toby will do his best to visit.

I really want to say the Christmas experience together really hit me emotionally. The idea of a friend wanting to not be with family but with a friend over that whole weekend.. I just can't...

Ian was being far too ass-holish and while he had justifications Toby should have just held him and not let go and kissed him publicly or something and then apologized for not being there. Which btw we never really learn why he wasn't there or why he didn't call him or the other. Yes he was pushed away but since he redid the locker he clearly thought it'd work which would mean he clearly should have been in the Gym or called him or come over that night or whatever. We also never learn why early in the story Toby isn't at school for some reason and thus can't protect him, nor what really happened during that time I suppose. That seemed a bit forced but who knows. I suppose we don't know the reasoning of why there were no bullets in it either, though that would have been an extremely depressing albeit realistic (though most people don't kill themselves while their friend that loves them is literally shouting at them not to and that they love them admittedly) factor.

I think I would like to have seen more forced runs and jogs with each other and perhaps a legitimate desire by Ian not to change but to at least to improve himself because someone else really did care about him.

Thank you for the story even if it's from before 2008 back when I was first going to my first college and had just graduated from a horrible bullying experience. Made me cry a few times.
delsana chapter 6 . 1/1/2019
Being asked to review every page requires me to reread everything which makes me emotional which is the whole purpose of my reading these things but you know.. For different reasons.

Inner monologue for kiss was again needed, I do not like having to guess the actual motivations of characters this far in and I never really felt that changed much later on.

I also have no idea if after every school day they drag him to the gym and beat him up or only on days when it is mentioned etc.

Can I please get the epilogue? I'll review the rest but it takes a lot out of me to re read emotionally charged things and then review them.

Hopefully I didn't pop in on this site at a point where no one will see I'm trying to review it to get the epilogue.
delsana chapter 5 . 1/1/2019
It seems odd that Ian is more blamed for reacting than the people who hurt him by Toby. There's a difference between words and actions.

It also seems odd that Ian has not taken his advice to get a hall pass 10 minutes before to leave school early and avoid the whole gym thing, which still should have drawn adult attention.

Its also really odd he's not reporting anyone to the school administration.
delsana chapter 4 . 1/1/2019
So we see now his telltale sign of affection which if I remember correctly fades away eventually. The tap on the chin confirms that for whatever reason he feels some kind of amiable kindness or interest be it because he saw him without his gothic clothes on or he feels some kind of friendliness. Without knowledge of the point of view of Toby it's hard to draw any conclusions.

It also seems very odd that even still they can just drag him into a gym and physically assault him. Giving a kick to the stomach is literally considered assault with a deadly weapon when someone is on the ground and more so this is akin to being a willing accomplice as you watch harassment which until now is non physical. The assault should be a fast trip to the principals office especially given the cameras in the gym and his desire for revenge against them.

Its odd that adults never seem to appear.
delsana chapter 3 . 1/1/2019
I can see how this works, but I'm still surprised there's no investigation and I still need some kind of inner monologue or thoughts from Toby to garner what is causing the change given be participated while others hurt him cruelly physically and emotionally and many times on his own. Paradigm shifts require something and I just keep wondering what it is.

I've read the story fully so I know the answers won't come but this is my play by play.
delsana chapter 2 . 1/1/2019
It might be helpful to have received some kind of inner monologue of why the jock cared now given he had seen him in pain numerous times most likely. Was it just the fact that blood surprised him even though he'd probably given him many bloody noses and such, or was it something else. Also the nurse would have seen injuries as would the doctor and such. This probably would have lead to an investigation.

I am a bit surprised it was a gastric ulcer. I don't think I ever suffered like that from my bullying so I can't say if that was realistic or not.
delsana chapter 1 . 1/1/2019
Want the epilogue even though it's late. Wish it had just been posted instead but I'll play the game.

- So far I'm confused on why no teachers have become involved and I suspect that will be a running notion in my other chapter reviews. I was bullied my whole k12 education and even then teachers did get involved on particularly bad days.
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