great description. i like the last line. i hope you do well in the contest, and keep writing!

O, I really like this. D

Great concept, and awesome imagery. I can totally relate to the line 'As they look past the lake, past the tattered swans, nestled amongst the rocks', for some odd reason.

Good luck with the contest!

I like this very much, its great. I wish you the best of luck in your competition, it is very note worthy.