Reviews for oceanside
012323232 chapter 1 . 3/30/2008
as you sped away from me

good ending

it rips away the gentle scene you began with and makes the piece more memorable
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 2/7/2008
Just beautiful, and I'm not sure what else to say.
Edgar Wellington chapter 1 . 2/4/2008
I really like the opening of this poem. I like the idea that this whole poem is like your "photograph" of the moment, yet it is about you being photographed. This is a wonderful juxtaposition of viewpoints, especially since it includes juxtaposed points in time too.
multiples of six chapter 1 . 1/17/2008
This is so pretty.. I don't have another word for it. Even the ending is more pretty than it is sad. I hope you see that as a compliment, haha )
smile for the sunshine chapter 1 . 1/17/2008
that was beautifully written. i loved it. good work.
Leaves of Labefaction chapter 1 . 1/15/2008
The third verse is the best in my opinion. The whole thing is very beautiful, a great combination of happiness and melancholy.
Aomera chapter 1 . 1/14/2008
again, stunning imagery - love the sails idea. photography is fascinating...always provokes poets
creepy kiss on tuesday chapter 1 . 1/13/2008
[ did he die? i don't quite understand the ending. it makes me sad, though.
Aquafied chapter 1 . 1/13/2008
this makes me think of catalina

even though i've never been

nice beach days are so very rare.
siphoned afterglow chapter 1 . 1/13/2008
Wow. Yeah, I like it.

I like the intense imagery and how each line gave a clear picture. I loved the last paragraph the most, it had beauty and a sense of lingering sadness trailing in its wake.

wonderful piece.

[and thanks for the amazing feedback you leave me]