I really enjoyed your story. The only thing I could suggest if you plan to edit later, maybe show the development of their physical relationship better in the beginning. You are obvioulsly very good with the smut. That last chapter was very well done and didn't have any of the standard cliche's.

I loved this. It was a very nice little journey you took me on. Thank you ever so much _

Allanasha Ke Kiri

The magic explanation was long enough to be understandable, but short enough that not to be an info dump. Good job.

5:"steal muscles" steel

6:"want to loose you" lose, unless you mean set him free.

7: Joshua! How could you forget so quickly? But she is his mother.

It took me seven tries to get to chapter 10. FP is being so forbidding, it's like dealing with a toddler's "no"s.

10: Joshua's taller because when they were both standing he nibbled Oren's ear, which he couldn't have done unless he was at least a bit taller or on his tip toes.

12: Allen is his highness not "his majesty". Only the sovereign and spouse are majesty, princes are highness, aren't they?

14: Come on Oren, get a clue.

So cute.

Thank you for this story, I loved it. Joshua and Oren are really cute together and the plot was good (a tiny bit too abvious maybe but the reactions of the characters are sometimes more interesting than finding the twist).

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Hello! Just dropping you a note to let you know how much I enjoyed this story. It was really sweet and made me smile at the end. I read it all in one sitting, too! Oren was my favorite character. I really liked all the info about his magic, too. I really like this universe you've created. Hopefully, you will be inspired to write about it again in the future! Cheers! ~Elyrian

i actually LOLed. : )

because this is a finished story i feel slightly like id be hounding you if i left a review at each chapter. haha

but i loved how you actually made me laugh. the teasing from the king was great. : )

good story : )

I liked how you gave a bit of history on the rainbow magic. it made the story seem fuller.

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Yay! Happy ending! I love happy endings. I love the beginning, I love the end, the middle is okay. SO general consensus, I love this! Great job!

so cute...

Really nice ending. It's an amazing story

You know what I like about Joshua? His broken leg. If he tries to get away, he can't run very fast, now can he? *insert evil/perverted laugh here*

That's actually one of the most interesting magic systems I have ever heard of. Most people just go "my characters have magic," and leave it at that, but you managed to make your very own magic. Very cool! (Yes, I understood the explanation.) P

And what goes around comes around. )

I love you Qui! This is an awesome story so far. YAY!

*sends love and joy and awesome homemade cookies* Qui, you will never cease to amaze me with your talents. Not only can you write awesome stories, unlike me, you actually finish them! I love you!