Reviews for The Mark of Thorn: Book of Scars |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Ok, now I'm hooked. I really wanna know what happens with Diego and Cornelia, not to mention Gabriel. Oh and there so is more to Hendrick than meets the eye. I'm think he is demi-human, maybe something canine which would explain the hate for Diego but knowing me my assumptions are usually wrong. It's a very good story. Please update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You do not disappoint Miss Lenore. Very very good. I have to say I like your writing style. It reminds me of one of my favored authors, Raymond E. Feist. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I've only read two chapters and I'm in love! Oh I hope the rest is just as good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beauty and the Beast, Rapunzel, Puss in boots... But I just cant seem to place this Hendrik fellow... Exemplary job by the way, I'm glad I stumbled upon this gem! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i just want to tell u that you are the most awesome author i have ever read from on fictionpress! i really hope u write more grusome tales! _ i could stay up forever reading your stories! i also hope tht one day u could publish at least one of ur stories! btw this is my first time reading this story cuz i was too busy reading the other ones, but i bet this one will be worth the read too! _ |
![]() ![]() ![]() On the material as a whole: it did feel right as a stand-alone, much like the first books of other series. Obviously the plot has been unfullfilled, but the characters are all now together for the story to really begin, with hints already placed at future events. Well-done. The way you have woven all of the different fairy tales together is perfect. I honestly did not expect it to flow as smoothly as it does, although I still have no idea what fairy tale Hendrick is from, and that is irking me. The characters are not as strong as those in your previous stories, but as this is to extend much longer, I am sure that such development will come in time. No real worries there. Of the characters, Hendrick is my favorite, although his hatred of Diego is somewhat irritating. If he keeps trying and failing to kill him through all five books, it will get very tiring. I like the blossoming of a love triangle between Cornelia, Gabriel, and Hendrick, if that's what it is. Onto book two for me now, though it's definitely more daunting than this. Hopefully I'll get caught up eventually... |
![]() ![]() ![]() You are a fantastic author. I've plowed through all of your stories. Publish, girl! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well! Another job well done! I will admit that I passed this story over when you first started writing it in favor of another one, but then I found myself backtracking to it, and I am very glad I did. The story fits together well, each character holding on to their...character throughout the story. The conflicts, both internally and externally, keep things interesting and the plot, with all it's intricacies, is interesting in itself and addictive, pulling the reader back for more (at two in the morning). So. All in all, a well done story and I am on my way to book two! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i read the news on your profile page, and here's my thought: pleasepleaseplease post the book of beauty. i started book of scars and stayed up until four finishing it. it was just so good, i couldn't stop. i also noticed that you put up a picture of diego, and i love how you drew the eyes. do you think that you can put up the picture of gabriel again? i didn't get a chance to look at it before. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Amazing, as usual. As for the material as a whole... I would say it is very well-planned and written. You've answered necessary questions within the story itself. (I have yet to find myself going "WTF is going on?" or "When did that happen?") Also, you've left just enough questions to make the readers want more. My biggest questions are definitely "Did Narestra kill Rapunzel or really just send her away?" and "Who are the newest victims?" But, as I've rambled quite enough here, I will say that I am greatly anticipating Book 2 and I'll be reading The Captor's Redemption in the time between! |
![]() ![]() This is great! I love your incorporation of the different fairy tales into your story: Rapunzel, Beauty and the Beast, Puss in Boots. I love the way you put a dark twist on all your stories. This story line is pretty cool. I feel like it's like a video game where the characters have to go on a quest and battle monsters and eventually beat the Boss (the sorceress). I'm looking forward to them beating the sorceress but I am curious about WHY the sorceress is cursing and killing people. There has to be a deeper reason than 'she likes to kill for fun'. I'm sad you took down "The Art of Silence". I thought it was getting good at the chapter you ended with. |
![]() ![]() Lani, Splendid, splendid, absolutely SPLENDID! I very much look forward to the second book, I do hope it will come quick enough for me to indulge over Spring Break. Marvelous job on the Book of Scars. Keep up the great work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whoa...that was totally awesome! I say, a great ending to the first book. I can't wait till you post the next one! I assume that is Narestra at the end, right? Is she not as completely evil as I first thought? Instead, she just enacts her own brand of vigilante justice? Hm...will the third Marked be a result of her next attack? Oh, and I always wondered how Cornelia manages to kick bad-guy butt in a corset? Just a thought. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm fascinated. The story line, characters, rhythm, everything-I'm just enthralled with 'Book of Scars.' It was such a lovely work, dear. And great closure! Your extra effort on this chapter really paid off. Far too many writers fall prey to shoddy endings and loose ends. Fortunately, your stylistic precision and wonderful storyteller's instincts prevented this. The biblical quote was also a nice touch. Truly a fitting close to such an enjoyable piece. Now, to address the questions you had for me in your last response (since I cannot, for the life of me, figure out how to directly reply to your replies). Most of the issues I found were primarily within Hendrik’s and Diego's fight. It seemed that you set the entire situation up very well and we have a good grasp of what's going on, where they are physically... and then the story just becomes muddled and we really doesn't know what's happening or where they are and so forth. That, for me, was the really huge issue, the fact that I hadn't a clue where they were or what they were even doing. I noticed that you tended to do that on varying levels in chapters 23 through 25. Watch out for that when you're rereading your chapters; often when writers write fight scenes, their minds perceive the images faster than the writers can type and you wind up with that foggy, messy narrative. One other thing that tended to bother me about the cited fight scenes was that your wording felt weak. Your adjective choices aren't what I come to expect from you (unique, colorful, fresh) and your verbs and adverbs lacked the pizzazz that would've made the scenes really pop. Hope this helps and looking forward to the next book. Take your time posting it though-I haven't had the time to look over 'Captor' at all with all these new chapters for 'Scars'! -Ink |
![]() ![]() as a whole, I found the story to be very engaging and interesting, the plot moved at a steady pace, scenes were decribed beautifully, the slow and intricate unravelling of the characters pasts and secrets was very well done, each chapter left me wanting more and i hope book 2 begins soon! this last chapter i feel was an intro into the 3rd marked person? i so wanted to kick that servants ass, being mean to old people is no-no, its like the oldest fairy tale rule an Idiot...he just screwed over everyone in the area. |