Good Job!

This is turning into quite the mess isn't it?

This definitely sound entertaining.

vute

xx

*new reader*

i just read your whole story and its awesome. i love the nonc-cliche thing.

its great! please update soon

You totally had me going with the ending of the last one, but this was great! Good job!

Yay for Vince! I love it! I've read a couple of stories you had on your favorites list and they were awesome!

i have to say this is a good plot... i'm a little disappointed that Mia didn't go all gung-ho on Will in the cafe but then that would have made Vince's fight less dramatic... i like i like

Okay, so I found your story on this forum page on FP, and decided to check it out. I'm in dire need of something refreshing to read.

So far, so good. I am reviewing this as reading so that if there were any typos/errors that need to be pointed out aren't forgotten. :))

First off, there was a typo in the sentence:

"..Yet he doesn't sleep around like some of the other guys, and generally seems like a nice guy. I think the only reason he's popular is because of Will Howard, the kind of his crowd."

"kind"? It makes sense in a way, but I thought it might be "king."

:D

Another thing:

"..'Hey Jeremy'..."

That whole scene.

I don't think it makes sense, at least to me, on how she leaves but she knows the exact dialouge of what happens.

Maybe separate that part where Nadine hears this.

It'd make it less confusing.

Well hope the feedback is beneficial towards you! I'm going to go read more!

YAY! :P

kthnxbai,

Martin the Waterskier

Wow, this is just as good as a Trip on the Lips!

great story, especialyl love the ending!

Great story! Looking forward to the rest!

I'm dying of laughter right now! Great job!

wowie wow wow! i realy luv tis story. keep it up!

this is a really good 1...

update soon pls

This chapter is adorable. In fact this whole story is adorable! Update ASAP!