i have never heard of a plot like this before... so good job on the creative part!

and your excellent with the cliffhangers! which means you should update soon!

love the story, keep up the good work!

The plot is very interesting, and I enjoyed reading it. I'm going to offer you a suggestion for you to use if you want and that is to try to make your sentences more complex. Try to make them longer by combining sentences with semi-colons and such. I think doing this would greatly improve the quality of your story. It's just a suggestion. Well, hope I get to read more of this with a second chapter!