Did Ariel deserve it? Perhaps. Pierre did warn her.

Is Pierre just cruel? Well, he does have a good reason for doing it, but even doing bad things with good intentions doesn't justify what he is doing.

Over all this is really well-written. Especially for a thirteen year old. .

Is Pierre cruel? Not really, after all he did warn her... Did Ariel deserve it? Can't really say, there are a lot worse people out there after all...

And moving on to the brunt of the review, aside from a few spelling errors, it's a pretty good fic, and you did seem to capture Ariel's attitude perfectly. I'm impressed. Keep writing.

You should make this a short story with chapters in them to amplify the suspense that you want us to see. I think Pierre's the one who is evil. I mean, capturing girls in books? What's the reason behind that? But overall, it's not bad.