|Reviews for Bonded Souls|
| Falkner chapter 1 . 1/21/2008
That was an interesting little story. I really enjoyed your writing style, and would only recommend that you avoid clichés like "as if she had the plague." I'm guilty of doing the same stuff, but I've learned from experience that they can annoy readers. Otherwise, my main comment would be that rather than set the story up with bullet points in the beginning, you should maybe make the story longer and incorporate that information into it bit by bit and go on from there. It made a good short story but it has the potential to work as a kind of novella.