Reviews for Loose, Jeremiah!
xDancingintheRainx chapter 1 . 3/4/2008
I like this. The mood is different to any other piece I've read, and its really refreshing to read something new. Usually, I'm not a big fan of rhyming, because the writer ends up making the piece sound cheesy and forced, but that wasn't the case here. The piece flows well and doesn't seem forced at all. Actually, now that I read it over again, I'm not even sure if you meant for the piece to rhyme. It kind of slightly rhymes. Anyway, it works really well for this piece. I think it contributes to the mood. Good job with the word choice. Well done.

Thanks for the review!
chaos called creation chapter 1 . 2/16/2008
I wasn't expecting this to rhyme so that was a pleasant surprise.

This reads like a song. I love the line "the wheat's too thick and the temperature's much too high."

I don't think the word "agriculture" really fits into this though, it disrupts the flow a bit.

Keep writing!
masterful me chapter 1 . 2/10/2008
I feel as if I could turn on the radio right now and hear this with some blue-sy beat. Very nice work!