Reviews for Falling apart
dragonflydreamer chapter 1 . 12/28/2008
Wow, powerful last line. You make it seem really dark, but in a beutiful natural way. The word "cigarette" sticks out like a sore thumb, very akin to your meaning.

Also, "midnight cigarettes" - I like the ambiguity in that, and the whole poem in fact. The way I interpret it is a person thinks the world is horrible and is standing around at night, smoking it away. But I get the feeling that others could interpret it differently. Very interesting for a poem of this length.

Sparkles from the Review Marathon (link in profile)
Ygg chapter 1 . 2/16/2008
The last line is stunning in its imagery! This is an excellent Haiku with a deep message. A favorite!
Basara chapter 1 . 1/31/2008
falling apart in one's vision of awareness...

nice...
Let It Rain chapter 1 . 1/27/2008
I wasn't immediately hit with a mental image but when I read over it again I really liked it. Hm. I like it a lot.
generically beautiful chapter 1 . 1/26/2008
"Midnight cigarettes" is a beautiful line.

-Christine
SEMMU chapter 1 . 1/26/2008
Interesting? I am definitely left wanting. Was this a thought that escaped as quickly as it appeared? Anyway, I see no beginning or end. Write on!
vaudeville summers chapter 1 . 1/26/2008
one of the greatest poems of this length i've read in a long time. wonderful imagery!

DeeAnna