|Reviews for The Sylvian Outlaws|
| Bookworm chapter 37 . 5/20/2013
I think you might have written "Gareth" instead of "Garibaldi" in ch 36, when Garibaldi says he was proud of her.
| Nepenthe Intensions chapter 37 . 2/24/2013
Oh my... it's been so long that I should probably abandon all hope that this story will be finished but, I'll continue being a hapless dreamer xD
I loved this. I loved the characters-not a single one of them fit into a typical archetype or cliche. The whole thing struck me as extremely original. I loved every second, although I must admit sometimes the pacing was a little off. It would go very slow at some points, and then reallysuperfast at others; in action scenes I usually appreciate that quality, but occasionally it became a smidge hard to keep up. Nothing to be flayed over, though xD
My favorite thing about this story was how you projected the thoughts of the characters. Real people face internal struggles that outwardly seem illogical, and you brought that nature of humans to life-especially in Adrianne and Nireem.
If you ever update this, I will be excited beyond words xD my friend was watching me read the last few chapters and went, "I've never seen someone get so excited over a *book* before..."
You were responsible for that :D haha!
| Ms.Julia chapter 37 . 10/3/2012
oh goodness, please update :( I just realised that you haven't touched this story in two years and it breaks my heart to see it go unfinished.
| Ms Julia chapter 1 . 10/2/2012
I'll log in later but so far so good, it flows. :)
| Guest chapter 36 . 6/30/2012
this is all way too much! the story is far too stretched and I keep losing track of the characters because they aren't well developed and they are very forgetful! The two marriages was crossing the line. Kavour coming back was too predictable and now after all that Adrianne is dead. i never know how to envision this story in my mind because there is so little detail in setting. For example, Arnae is in the imperior ballroom, and then she is suddenly looking up at the sky? you're so off. And the reason im still reading is because there are so many things yet to solve, but there is only one chapter left and unfortunately i realized now that i shouldve stopped reading a long time ago. perhaps the beginning was the best part, until this got all screwed up when you tried to put more action into it. So here it is: there's too much action to follow, too many plot twists -and not even a very organized plot- undeveloped characters, little setting, and i can go on forever. When you revise this, i hope you re-edit this entire story, cos the middle to ending is just bull. Thank you and have a nice time redoing this whole TRASH!
| StorieLuver101 chapter 1 . 6/29/2012
Great story so far!:)
| vampireprincess003 chapter 37 . 3/31/2012
:O OMG THIS STORY IS NOT DONE PLZZZZZZZ UPDATE THIS IS AN AWSOME STORY I LOVE IT! I LOVE JESPERIAN LOL AHSJDJDJSJDJ WHY IS IT NOT COMPLETE U HAVE NOT UPDATED IN SOOO LONG . D: IM BEFGING I PLZ HOW COULD U JUST LEAVE US HANGING IN SO SAD NOW
| vampireprincess003 chapter 1 . 3/29/2012
Story seems really interesting so far :)
| AranaBanana chapter 1 . 12/26/2011
It's been quite a while, and I hope you haven't given up on this story. It really is awesome, and to leave us hanging so close to the end, it's frustrating! I hope you'll finish this story, but no matter what, thank you for posting it.
| Zuut chapter 37 . 12/4/2011
This took me an entire day to read. XD And I rather like it. The characters for the most part are likable, although I find almost all the nobles aggravating. I feel like the whole Princess and Pauper thing was cliché but I like how you played it up as a punishment for the princess and then poor Arnae goes through hell.
Tamir is by far my favourite character. Perhaps it's because as the comic relief character he actually has a purpose (or at least he did at the beginning and near the middle, he's kind of hushed aside I suppose because Arnae doesn't see him as much and his he still at the castle as the blacksmith? I was kind of confused as to where he went...). It helps he's a bit of an ass in addition to his good points, makes him feel realistic. Or maybe I just like the hot blacksmith? XD
I've really warmed up to Ambria. Originally I had thought of her as the typical bitchy archetype and thought, "oh god," because I was tired of hearing heroes whine about who was mean to them. Then you go and make her a developed character, starting from when she doesn't tattle on Arnae about looking at the letters to eventually when she suffers for Miranda's sake. I found her much more likable now that yes, she's a bully, but she's also capable of human compassion. Because I guess, that's what makes us human eh?
But what disappointed me was where ever the hell Branic went to. He used to be a semi-main character and then he just kind of disappears in favor to Kavour. Then he comes back as a lovesick moron I mean, really? He just charges Jasperian? Why? I mean he hasn't been practicing the sword that long and I really don't think he's stupid enough to just /charge/ a carriage. Unless it went on a little differently than what I seem to think it did.
In addition, just curious as to how Kavour explain his injuries when he and Arnae fought? Or Arnae for that matter, if another noble isn't permitted to touch someone else's slave, then how come Arnae can come with bruises and sprains and such? I mean I suppose she can say she fell but I don't think that excuse works with Kavour.
Also, you threw a party for the princess but Arnae (and everyone else for that matter) never even mentions their birthday. I'm sure Nirmeen has a good excuse (she might not remember or even know) but I thought it was odd that neither Tamir or Branic mentioned theirs, especially since Tamir is a bit in love with himself.
I think I had more questions while reading this story but I really, really like it (because well, most of the time I felt compelled to read more and more) and I hope you can finish it soon!
| dontletgo chapter 22 . 10/2/2011
so does sylvian outlaw know about the switch, i get confused a bit
| Addicted Reader chapter 37 . 5/1/2011
It's been like, too long. I hope you haven't given up on TSO, because it is such an awesome story, it would be sad if it just ended like that. I hope you'll take as long (well, or not) as you must, but please don't give up on this.
| SlugHunter chapter 37 . 11/11/2010
so just congratz on writing so brilliantly xD im especially impressed at how original your characters are in that you dont make their lives all rainbows and sunshine :P
gotta say though the romance in the earlier chapters were kind of horrible... no offence... like they just popped out of nowhere... although the jasper one can now be attributed to the ring... but anyways its gotten better! :P and sometimes things are generally a bit abrupt... like the murder of Frey? i didn't feel it to have any real furtherance of the plot although it did add suspence and such
uhm just an overall observation, i feel like everything is becoming very intricate, a bit convoluted sometimes and its drifting away from the title of the Sylvian Outlaws and how they were introduced way back in the early chapters, perhaps it is due to sparodic updating? (hint hint XP)
but nah it has been so engaging to read and i have to thank you for sharing it on fp, i hope college and stuff goes well for you and you continue to update! _
and D: i'm sad i was looking forward to answering questions... but you didn't have any this chapter xP
in conclusion since it mayn't have been conveyed: you are an amazing writer and it was an awesome piece of work to read! best wishes :D
| Lyarah chapter 37 . 10/20/2010
I've just found this story and I've found a liking to it akin a good book. It is well written. The scenes are well described, without laying it thick. The characters are interesting and distinct, and I like how clever the twists are! It reminds me of a movie: for a moment you think you know where it's going, but if it's any good then it won't end up where you think it's going.
I thought this was the final chapter (as most stories I read these days are on their last leg), and my eyes nearly bugged out of their sockets thinking "you can't possibly end it like this!". And then I thought I'd read the word "sequel" somewhere... but I am happy to realize that there will be more!
I hope you do keep writing at this one, even if it takes time. "Saka" knows, it took me forever to update when I was posting stories.
| UniTamarin chapter 37 . 9/7/2010
hehe hello!_ I just read your story and it's amazing... I never believed I could find such good story here on FictionPress but I guess I was lucky!
Well concerning the story... I would like to make some guesses... I was wondering if the words "duse vymena" have been just something you made up because if I made some slight changes and made "výměna duše" it would mean something really interesting in my laguage (Czech)... then it wouldn't be hard to figure out the rest of the plot... and then to ensure that Adrianne stayed silent I would probably add the ring on "her" finger... hm... I guess that would be kind of smart move for Jasperian... but then again what good could Adrianne do for him in the state she is in if I'm right? anad it would be really harsh to do something like that to her...:( and poor Timar... but it would probably be better than being dead...hm... hm...
well anyway I really apologize if I'm sounding like idiot but I was trying not to spoil it to others if I was right... really hard thing to do...O_o
P.S. it took me three minutes to figure out why I was staring at those two words so if I'm not right you owe me three whole minutes of my life!:P
P.P.S. I would like to make one other wild guess... I was wondering if Gareth and Hait had something in common... like being one person? I was wondering about it for a while now... it just seems like a twist to plot I would expect... or something like that..._