Hai tharr!

Well, that was an amazing chapter. It had me yelling at my mother to go away until I was finished and to bother me later. It was awesome, and unpredictable. I really can't wait to know what happens next. So I'm not going to ask any question, I'll just patiently (or not so patiently) wait for the next chapters. And don't you dare give up on this! You've got me hooked, so keep up with the good work.

Great beginning, there's just enough clear detail and the dialogue is well written, clear cut and paced well with the action - its great how you've set up the characters' personalities and the setting - will keep reading :)

I love this story! Keep writing.

I think that you could add a bit more suspense though, perhaps some curious surprise near the end?

No! You can't leave the story right there please update soon! I love this story and the plot, setting and characters you've created. Arnae is the perfect strong girl character that has everyone rooting for her and Kavour is just *sigh* LOVE him and Timar cracks me up. I think you've done a really nice job with this story and shaping your characters the only things I'd have to say are sometimes the story got confusing with all of the different subplots and the plot at times was hard to follow. Also sometimes the details got to be a bit much, I loved how you were descriptive with everything it's just it sometimes seemed a bit overboard to me. Hope you update soon!

~Gems

more more more more more more more! and soon please!

You have such amazing characters, very intresting and realistic. But I think the beginning of the story was a bit slow.

really good. More detail amongst the dialouge would be good but its really great.

Wha? Andrianne's dead? Well, i didn't rlly like her anyways. Anyway, plz update soon! I'm looking forward to the nxt chapter!

I spent this entire day reading when I should have been studying for my tests tomorrow. I'd originally read the first chapter a couple of months ago and decided to save the story for later, since I didn't have time. But when I revisited it today, I was appalled at how I'd managed to completely miss such a fantastic story like yours. I think everything is amazing, from the characters to the romance to the plot. It's all so original, and I sincerely admire you for such an intricate plot. And I was recently studying Garibaldi in my european history class, so that was a pleasant surprise. I'm wondering, did you get Kavour from Cavour, the Italian minister who helped unify Italy? I was wondering where you got such a great name (it's stuck in my head now). Anyway, please update soon, for my peace of mind. This story will be stuck in my head until it's finished!

Well it's been quite a while. Wow, lots of stuff to digest this chapter. First things that come to mind, the end was confusing to me. Why does Adrianne turn? And I was under the impression that Hait kills her, that is until you said 'Who killed Adrianne?'

The swan thing is bothering me now. I suppose its just been a while but I dont remember what you're referring to.

Mm perhaps I should've said this a couple chapters back, but I didnt review many chapters. Anyway, one of my regrets, I really liked Jasperiann. And he turned evil. Makes me a bit sad. He seems like a complete different person now though. He seemed so warm and kind back when Arnae first met him! I don't know, I thought he was a sweet guy.

I thought the ending was sufficiently creepy and it was a nice end for the chapter. I think my biggest problem with the chapter in general was that it seemed confusing. Perhaps its cause how I imagined some of the scenes wasn't how you had, I don't know.

Hm another question. So Snowsdale, is a different country? I had always thought it was a town or city in Arylla.

I'm interested to see how the rest of the story unfolds. Guess I shall have to wait and see.

I loved the ending to this :) completely creepy. I hope you're pulling a Kavour, of course, but I don't see any wiggle room.

A fantastic story. Please update again soon!

It was very obvious that you were writing this in a different frame of mind from normal, as it was rather a different style than the rest of the chapters. I really liked this style, although it was a bit jarring after a fairly consistent writing style in all previous chapters. In answer to your questions, in order, a lot but not too much action, not too much plot, not weird, creepy (you were very successful there), and I am going to hold off on future guesses.

Adrianne is dead! that was a wild chapter please update soon!

OMGOMGOMGPOGMOMG!

action: perfect amount

plot: SCARY

marriage ritual: a bit confusing. :

ending: hella creepy O_O

omgomgomg her uncle killed adrianne? is she REALLY dead? ah, when are you updating again? i'm sorry i haven't been reviewing, but i read the past chapters over again so i'd know what happened! omg, i'm so confused right now! ahh!

my goodness, am I confused...It's been way too long since I read the beginning of this story. Who's Duke Garibaldi again? Is he good? Who was Lady Vivianne? What happened to the lady who was having an affair with Lord Duncan or something or another? Why is Lord Vincent an ally?

-sigh-... would you mind just running through the highlights again? I know it's a terrible hassle, but if you have a summary or plot line plan of this story saved up somewhere, it would be super duperly helpful if you shared it with us. Or maybe I'm the only one confused.

I feel like I couldn't breathe in this chapter. There was just so much action! It's amazing to think that all of this is happening in just one day.