|Reviews for In Between|
| Melissa Norvell chapter 2 . 2/3/2008
You have an intersting story here. I'd like if you continued but remember to work on description of characters, actions and places. as readers we don't have a good view of your characters and settings. We come into a story reading with an empty image and if we don't get one by the time we are done, we tend to not be interested in reading any further.
Your story has potential and I'd like you to continue it just remember to work on description.
If you wish or need help on it, feel free to read some of my works. I'd love to hear from you.