Reviews for if only the sun could shine a little brighter
shadow-of-a-trackless-sea chapter 1 . 5/4/2008
sad but sweet. i liked how you compared monotomy and a highway, very interesting.
i'd delete this if possible chapter 1 . 3/6/2008
I know the feeling. Being trapped in monotony is so suffocating, isn't it? And it seems like everyone else knows where they're going ("those cars... [that] are anything but still") and you're just stuck in one place, not knowing where to go from there. At least, that's what I get out of this. I like it.
relapse into change chapter 1 . 2/18/2008
hmm i like this

i think in the last stansa i'm just instead of i am just sitting...would flow better with the poem..but that's just

my opinion. :]
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 2/7/2008
I've always loved the sound of cars, and now I know why: "they are anything but still." Lovely work.
by His blood chapter 1 . 2/3/2008
i need prayers very badly right now.

please, just ... pray for me. please.

i don't know what else to say. please. i need help.

i need your prayers. please. right now.


Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 2/2/2008
Great poem. I really liked it. Keep it up.

Autumn Lace chapter 1 . 2/2/2008
Very good.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 2/2/2008
but the rush of passing cars on the highway/outside my window are more than exhilarating... the rush... is more than

I like the subject of the piece a lot.. its really interesting and the way you described it you can see and hear it... beautifully done