Reviews for waiting
BalletManiac chapter 1 . 2/6/2008
I really really liked your poem!

In the beginning when you said 'And my fingers ache from the tugging' I went .. OH YEAH ! That happens ! Nice observation !

The line where you say 'With bored feet, distracting my mind' I stopped to think about what you mean.. I didn't understand it quiet well. Do you mean that your tapping your feet? It could be just me lol..

Heart thumps to its own tune and

My feet mark out a broken pattern

Éxcellent ..
person is gone chapter 1 . 2/5/2008
Nice Very nice. Could've fit as just a normal story-like-description-thinger too, but 'tis fine as a poem. I was wondering what it was leading up to - the ending made me smile XD

Just one stylish note; all the descriptions are great and you really get a feeling of what's going on, just the line, "With bored feet, distracting my mind" - 'bored' seems not to fit in with the rest, which is all anxiety. Were you meaning restless?

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