A very intriguing read, to say the least. I really liked the supernatural feel to it; especially the part where the vampiress was torn apart by all of those mouths. It was a very disturbing picture, enough to make me shudder. I don't shudder easily. ;)

I like your imagination and the original ideas. The beginning was very attention grabbing, mainly because the main character did not start off with talking about himself, but rather the other two more minor characters in the chapter. That doesn't happen very often, and it made me want to read more in order to learn about the person speaking.

I saw one typo:

"Instead, she was known to toy around with her victim like a cat eying a trapped mouse."

(hopefully I did the HTML right and the typo is bolded)

Hope to see another update soon. :)

Great chapter. Your writing is very smooth and flows easily, making your work a pleasure to read. The image of the mouths ripping the vampire apart was...different. You have a very disturbed imagination - i like it!

Ah, well, thought it would make certain things in VSW clearer but... Still confusing. At least you've given the definition of the Erabus.

Carmilla is 500 years old ? Instead of :

"I am impressed by your little speech and because you’ve caught me in a generous mood, I will grant you your little request. But I will keep the boy’s belongings as he has already graciously offered them to me.”

perhaps she should have said something like :

"Oh, you've misunderstood me complately ; There is no 'instead'. There is only 'first' and 'second'."

Or something like that.

Um... perhaps, perhaps... It's a good short horror story. We shall see how it fits in.

Nice twist.. Loved the "We are Legion" Part. :)

I only know Harker is a name from Dracula, seeing I read it myself once upon a time.

Do continue.

You have quite an interesting story here Ghost. Disturbing while placing intriguing points here and there. I like how you thought of a way to, essentially, trick a vampire into killing themselves...sort of. Overall, great story that has a perfect prelude to the next chapter.