Reviews for Always Wear Clean Underwear
Guest chapter 21 . 4/2/2012
this was amazing! thanks for posting it again!
WishBlade chapter 1 . 3/28/2012
Her narration really makes me laugh! Love it :)
MuffinsRoxSox chapter 20 . 12/21/2011
Lol. Cat reminds me of my cousin. She started squealing in excitement over some underwear from Victoria' Secret last Christmas.

All of those baked goods references made me hungry. I seriously am in need of some chocolate chip cookies now.

Vince Very much so.
Spontaneous Juju chapter 20 . 11/26/2011
Dear God in Heaven, THAT WAS AWESOME.

Seriously! Cat's hilarious, witty, realistic-in-the-way-that-makes-you-wish-you-were-that-awesome-because-it-is-so-totally-possible inner voice, the amazing characters you surround her with (especially Vince -yum- and Bri), the interesting, well-executed plot, all of it! I especially loved the way Cat threw in her own food-related metaphors/exclamations, and the title chapters cracked me up as well. All in all, a job wonderfully done. :) If I had any complaint, it would be that you have quite a few comma splices that sometimes disrupt the flow, but that's easily fixed and not a huge problem. It's easily trumped by the characters/story itself; again, I loved the story, and will definitely be checking out your other stuff! :D

-Spontaneous Juju
Rosie chapter 1 . 11/19/2011
Hey there! I'm a judge from a website called 'A Drop of Romeo' and I'm happy to tell you that your story has been added to our archive, under the Miscellaneous category! Here's your review:

Rosie Thinks: The story is based around Cat, the hilarious girl who owns a bakery and works as a private investigator, and Vince, her love interest, trying to find a kidnapped girl. The main character, Cat, has a very strong and refreshingly comical voice. She is a sweet and endearing character who seems to be a bit of an adventure-junkie with her PI job. Vince makes a delicious male lead. Not only is he an attractive Italian, but I love who you're always guessing with him and it keeps his character fresh and entertaining.

Eeliahs gets the story going quickly without too much of an information dump at the beginning, which is always nice. I love how Cat owns a bakery, even though I was constantly hungry thanks to the baking references. 'Always Wear Clean Underwear' is a balance between romance, humour and action. I haven't read anything else like it on fictionpress, though it is vaguely similar to the Stephanie Plum novels. My only problem was that I wish she'd proof read her work, as there are quite a few small errors that, luckily, doesn't disturb reading too much. It was a very funny and well thought out story and I, for one, will definitely be looking out for the sequel!
non.graceful chapter 9 . 11/16/2011
: That i a semi colon.

: This is a colon.

Extracted from this chapter:

Your place :)

How could so much meaning be brought through a semi-colon and a right bracket?


Just thought you should know.
F.H.W chapter 21 . 10/29/2011
This story was funny and I loved it. Thanks for writing an awesome story:)
Pumpkin.-.-.Kween chapter 21 . 9/9/2011
I forgot to mention.. I think you should not have rated this story M, it should be rated T instead.
Pumpkin.-.-.Kween chapter 20 . 9/9/2011
I loved Catherine, her character was cute, sweet and endearing. I liked that you had a actual story outside of the romance. I loved the friends and family member (aside from Adeline of course) in the story and how family oriented the story was. I think though that you should have had more romantic interactions between Cat and Vince; at times it seemed like there wasn't any chemistry or connection between them and then BOOM all of a sudden they're having sex? That seemed a little far fetched to me. Another thing I think you should be aware of, is not putting too much of your own personal style into the story/characters. It dates your story and years from now if someone reads it, seeing outdated clothes will make the reader think "ew!". You want your readers to be able to put themselves into the story... relate. We don't need a blow by blow of what she was wearing everyday. The only time we really need to know about things like that, is when the outfit relates to the story ie: the night she went to the club and also the underwear she is wearing. All other times you mention (in full detail I might add) her clothing it is not neccesary. Also, although mentioning food occasionally is cute, you went a little overkill with it. I could have done without the referrences, and although I understand that you were trying to show that its important to her, I think we got the idea a long time ago.

It was a great story, you are a talented writter. I just think you have to be a little more aware of what you're writting and cut out what isn't needed. I'd rather have a shorter story that has substance then a longer story with lots of "filler".
BeetrootIsPink chapter 20 . 9/5/2011
I loved this story! It was so quirky and funny. I laughed through the whole thing. But at the same time I knew where she was coming from. Loooooooved it! Cant wait for you to add more on part 2 to this :D
Mitsuladymaid-sama chapter 21 . 8/27/2011
I loved how Cat's character was nice and sweet but also determined and courageous! And I'm super glad her and Vince are together.
taintedLullaby chapter 21 . 8/10/2011
Haha this is so cute and funny. I adore Cat. She was such a lovable character. Oh and Bri and Margot were hilarious. I wish Jack was in the story a bit more though because he was buckets of cute. He had me going 'Aww' at everything he did and said. I loved all of Cat's crazy eccentric inner monologues. And all the baking analogies were perfect.
J Money 012 chapter 1 . 8/5/2011
Haha, first chapter and I'm already cracking up! Good job, can't wait to read the rest. :)
ReadWriteLive chapter 21 . 7/31/2011
A cute story - should've done my work instead of reading it, but was still good. Very much reminds me of Stephanie and that story line (you mentioned you like the author) but I did enjoy your version.

One thing that might be nice - if you could include recipes for some of the treats you mention...
Kelly Rogala chapter 21 . 7/16/2011
I loved this story! I love the way you write, I laughed many times! You definitely have a way with words! I would love to read a sequel!
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