|Reviews for Twilight|
| Vanilla Tea chapter 1 . 5/5/2008
Their relationship at the end was really sweet. One thing I don't get, though, is why when she bumps into Jeremy she describes him as "particularly loathesome," then he turns out to be really nice. I guess it's because she really hadn't got to know him at all?
The first paragraph sort of...blew me away. The description was beautiful and incredible, I loved it!
The way her father was shot because he was seen with a white woman was sad, though... So was the entire racial part of this.
Awesome job on the Review Marathon, keep writing!
| GRAYTEXT chapter 1 . 4/20/2008
I liked the way you weaved "twilight" into how the narrator felt. It is sad such a superficial stamp as race still exists. Scientists have proven time and time again that there is more variation within one "race" than there is among them. I wish people could see that.
| Selarose chapter 1 . 3/18/2008
Aw, it's so sweet! Makes me wish there was more. :)
| Midnight Adrenaline chapter 1 . 3/3/2008
| BookGeek72 chapter 1 . 2/24/2008
I like the begining, its, compelling...almost urging you to read more...good job
| unemployed-joy chapter 1 . 2/9/2008
Aw, this was cute. I think this could stand to be worked into a longer and more developed novella of sorts, instead of a tight short story. Good job!