|Reviews for Running|
| John chapter 1 . 2/10/2008
The feeling of going somewhere without a reason, being lost, is there. Very interesting contrast with the phone at the end, I like how the wording comes full circle but still you change it up and it works because of that. Familiarity through change. The end is shocking but intriguing, I feel as if i understand the feeling you have even without knowing the context explicitly.
| Julius Gillian chapter 1 . 2/10/2008
I can really feel the speed and tornado brewing in this poem, in the first half for instance I really felt the seriousness and uncertainty at once.
Although, the last half of the poem remains somewhat of a mystery to me. It's confusing, is this person your father? And if so, did he choose to desert you which would explain the dream sequence. Was this a boyfriend? Maybe you intended for this passage to be somewhat ambiguous.
Overall I thought this was splendid to read, and you really pulled off the ABAB rhyme scheme very well. I'm not a fan of rhyme scheme but I think it was very smooth in this piece.
Lots of kudos.