|Reviews for Without Him|
| Sexy Vampirechick chapter 1 . 4/7/2008
Nice format!It really helps to make this poem more attractive.
Oh,I was wondering,since the word falling represents falling,would it look cuter if it was really in a falling motion?
Yeah..like you said fictionpress does kinda suck when it comes to formatting your writings,but that's that best I can do.
I think in the repetition of without,you should put it the reverse way, because to me seeing the words expand it makes it sound more long( I don't know if you get what I'm saying..if not then PM me).
Other than that,this was a really cool poem,but said 'cause the girl turned out emo.