Reviews for Valentines Day is for Suckers
Susurrent Threnody chapter 1 . 4/11/2008
Oh the pain! The drama! The angst! I see a person now bitter and set against love, jilted and broken but putting up a strong front. It is, however, a bit stereotypical, but that's fine. Three quaters of the stuff on FictionPress is anyway.

You know, I haven't looked on your profile in forever, and I finally do and BAM! You have a ton of stuff up.
SomethingNifty chapter 1 . 4/4/2008
I really enjoyed this!

Accountnotactive1752 chapter 1 . 2/13/2008
Well maybe I don't know that much about poetry but I like this one.

keep on writing!
Ryan Schiff chapter 1 . 2/12/2008
Sweetheart, darling, baby,

You've got a long ways to go on this one.

You won't like me, you can't love me.

I feel a shallow point in this poem,

Filled with meaningless cliches.

Why did I open it?

Because I have hope for all young poets,

that they can learn to believe in all the pretty

little vocabularies for writing well

of us

the poets.

Why did you put this up?

I'll hand you a pen, right now

I think you've got some revisions to do.

My rather rude rhetorical reconstruction of your rhyme has recommenced, and rather than just rebuke you, I'll rejoice and revel in your rebellious air!

The poem isn't beyond terrible, but it sits on a threshold. There are some very vague points, like the third line and the lines "Of us To her".

The last line is somewhat entertaining but overall rather droll. Sadly the sarcasm doesn't fit the mood of the rest of the poem, though don't get me wrong it is a clever line.

It doesn't seem as though this poem has found it's form. The lines look like the jagged broken teeth of my knife drawer, and like that disorganized mess of a utility drawer, it needs a good cleaning up before the guest's are allowed to fetch their own utensils.