|Reviews for The Jetsetter's Summer|
| MZ PEACHESZZ chapter 28 . 3/27/2008
Okay, this was a nice story. But, while your mechanics were smooth, your grammar flawless, your story was not realistic or moving enough. The pace was uneven- this last chapter with Sam and Greg was what, who...huh? The conclusions were also not heartfelt- you can have a happy ending and a "summer to remember" without the extra, extra, cliched, uneven cheese. If you edit this story, perhaps add more depth and add more character, it will have more meaning and resonate deeper. While the writing is definitely more "book worthy" as in all the itty things that make a story unprofession are taken care of, this story does not come even close to The Broken Road. You can write- just spend more time going over this story. You don't need to edit it for wrong words or spelling or other things like that. You need to edit the STORY. I had fun reading though!
Looking forward to more writing because you ARE a capable author.
| Aria Deloncray chapter 28 . 3/27/2008
I'm kinda disappointed with the way this ended. You completely switched your writing style and it didn't really work for me. What I loved most about this story was how you got to see each character's thought process and their struggle. What did Sam say to Greg? To me it looked like you took the easy way out and it was a disappointing ending to a great story.
| aurora borealis chapter 28 . 3/27/2008
Meh. It was a good chapter, but I don't want it to end like that... :( I want to read more about what happens with them. That's probably a compliment to your writing, though. ;) And thankfully Sam and Greg made up. Phew. I was a bit scared of losing my happy ending there. :D
Good job! :)
| I.Heart.Shi chapter 27 . 3/27/2008
say yes say yes! lol
i love these two, theyre so cute!
| WriterGurl123 chapter 27 . 3/27/2008
Say yes! Say yes! If she doesn't I will for her! lol
OMG! I can't believe that he kissed her! Amazing!
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| A Reader Peep chapter 27 . 3/26/2008
Aw! That was too cute. ] I'm sorry I didn't review earlier, but I have a tendency to be a lurker. Heh. But yeah, that's adorable. Jayla's story is probably my favorite out of the three. But I'm glad Allie developed into a more compassionate person, and it was nice to see a story that's not super-heavy but didn't have every single girl falling madly in love with someone. I wonder what'll happen with Sam...hope to see the end soon!
| The Rejection chapter 27 . 3/26/2008
All I can say is, WOW! I love this story. The three very different girls with their three unique storylines are incredibly interesting. I can associate with each of them in turn, though none of them are exactly like me. And their experiences are interesting without being over the top (though parts of Sam's storyline get a little over the top at times, she's still a down to earth girl). I can't wait for the next update but I dread this story being over! I just read all of it in the last two days. Great stuff.
| SkateForLife chapter 27 . 3/26/2008
Aw! That was an extremely cute chapter. One that makes me go aww...as you saw haha. But I'm so glad that Jonathon managed to get in a win soon!
| Kristina Malfoy chapter 27 . 3/26/2008
Ah! Finally! I've been reading the updates for the last couple weeks and never really had time to leave a review.
This is a wonderfully light-hearted novel, but I like the exploration of the three girls' evolutions. It is a wonderful young adult story that I think really fits the genre and encourages the readers to look at themselves and their assumptions and be accepting of the possible changes that come about. The romance is very welcome as well. Can't wait for the next update!
| Kjersti chapter 27 . 3/26/2008
AH! You can't just stop there!
Love your story. 'mough said.
| Gigi chapter 27 . 3/26/2008
yay for jayla!
| Aria Deloncray chapter 27 . 3/26/2008
Yes! She gonna say yes, right? Can't wait for the next.
| katie chapter 24 . 3/25/2008
i love this story! especially Jayla's part. :)
one thing though about the quote at the beginning of the chapter-Jon's a nascar driver right? so wouldn't that mean he would be in the Daytona 500 not the Indianapolis 500?
| WriterGurl123 chapter 26 . 3/25/2008
Allie has now learned the true meaning of friendship. I'm glad she had fun and didn't back down.
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| Aria Deloncray chapter 26 . 3/25/2008
Great chapter! Can't wait for the next.