|Reviews for A Sneeze|
| Violent Messiah chapter 1 . 9/20/2008
This was a rather interesting piece of fiction, quite entertaining. A little something for everyone that likes supernatural themed stories; a young man with a Frankenstein complex, infected and if I'm not mistaken, a chupacabra? That's just crazy, but I enjoyed it so who cares, right?
You have a pretty detailed descriptive style, helped me picture the scenes in my head just fine. Your dialog works, it sounded natural, especially the kids talking. The pacing of the story, while a bit slower then I would normally prefer, was still workable for this type of tale.
I saw very few errors, so that was great. The ending, while decent, seemed a little soft in comparison with the care and effort you took to build up to it. Perhaps it's just me, but it seems as if the pay off at the end could have packed a bit more of a punch to it.
Other then that small thing, I thought it was a fine tale. Nice job. Thanks for stopping by The Roadhouse...Cheers!