|Reviews for In the Kitchen|
| Skylinger chapter 1 . 5/25/2010
People really need to learn to review. I like this story. It's sweet. I did however notice a typo. You Have:
He had silently followed me to the refrigerator and now he was only a few inches away. I had to look up and up to meet his eyes.
It should read :
He had silently followed me to the refrigerator and now he was only a few inches away. I had to look up to meet his eyes.
| teardropsONroses chapter 1 . 5/5/2010
it's really cute!
| lianoid chapter 1 . 5/4/2010
-“The things I saw there… They frightened me, while simultaneously making my blood sing.” Brilliant line! I really like this description; well done!
I REALLY like this. So well written – no surprise there – and the ending gave me a laugh. What a steamy scene, my goodness. –fans self- I really like this and want to see how this would fit into the story you have in mind. I’m blushing and giggling like a hormonal teenager right now. Ha-ha. This is fantastic. Pace, flow, dialogue, description, everything was top notch. Keep it up.
| Bubbly Girl chapter 1 . 5/1/2010
Sorry, I haven't written a story yet so no need to review for me! I am just an avid reader who absolutly adores fictionpress! :P I really liked this! I liked how it was short and sweet at the same time. And no worries! I ALWAYS review a story that I have read and loved! :)
Keep up the beautiful work! :)
Peace, Love and Happiness! :)
| MeAsIAm chapter 1 . 4/29/2010
That was awesome! :D I liked the way you described the tension between the two - she could feel that it was affecting him too and vice versa. Some prelude about the whole scenario would have been better - but no worries still the story rocks! The beginning was a very tiny bit jumpy but you managed to get a hold on it!
A very very good read! :D
| weary writer chapter 1 . 4/14/2010
Dante with another extreme review.
I honestly couldn't tell that you had never really been too "pro" at writing romance, not from reading this anyways. I think it's the way you're able to make the characters three-dimensional (despite your fears), bringing their personality and voice across. And the two definitely had a chemistry, something worthy of best friends becoming something more.
Nice one shot, keep it up, keep em coming!
PYRO REVIEW TO THE EXTREME
| Kyllex chapter 1 . 4/4/2010
This was adorable! I loved it, especially the end. "Am I interrupting something?" is such a great line, haha. Awesome job! (:
| ExampleOfAWriter chapter 1 . 3/31/2010
aw! That is so cute! You are really good at writing! Kudos!
| I Murder on Impulse chapter 1 . 3/23/2010
| baconkittylover chapter 1 . 3/9/2010
So cute and sweet! I liked it very much!
Great writing, keep it up! :)
| SpasticLittleGirl chapter 1 . 1/25/2010
Hm, well, I don't have a story (yet). So I guess I won't review :P Nahh, I'm a nice girl *sweet smile*
OMG. THAT. WAS. SO. SWET. Lol I wonder how she could fall asleep while watching a horror movie. I can't sleep for 2 weeks after watching one!
| natalie chapter 1 . 1/20/2010
awesome...u've me a fan of urs...
| Caleb Kruspe chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
Hope you don't mind, but I saw an add for this one in the Roadhouse Bar, so I figured "why not give it a shot?"
It was light and 'fluffy' which is absolutely perfect for a quick read. Isn't it the truth that when the moment is perfct there's an interruption. The characters definately have chemisty between them because I could feel the sparks from this side of the computer screen. Nancy knows somethings going on, her reaction was priceless. "Interrupting somthing?"
You know, I thought this was going to wind up in the bedroom, and honestly, I'm glad it didn't; it proves there can be a good story without coughsexcoughcough.
Overall? A very, very good read; a favorite for sure. Well done :)
| Aero's Twin chapter 1 . 1/6/2010
I really enjoyed reading this story. The tension between Ben and Helena seemed to wrap around me like a python and hold me until I finished reading. It dives right in and jumps right back out so fast that I had to catch my breath to realize what happened. As a one-shot, this story is pretty much perfect. Though I think this would be great as a chapter in a continued story as well. I’m looking forward to read that if you ever get around to publishing it. Great story, here.
- Xerox of RH
| LadyLuck123 chapter 1 . 1/4/2010
That made me go 'Aww!'. It was really sweet, and intense!