Reviews for I'll Be Here Awhile
Guest chapter 4 . 11/2/2013
Aw man that sucks :/ poor Anna

Your writing is rather good
dreeming chapter 18 . 8/14/2013
I actually really enjoyed reading that! Absolutely loved your characters and the situations they got themselves into hahah. There's a couple of typos here and there though, and the one thing that did sort of bug me was your use of "ya" instead of "yeah" or something similar. But don't mind me, it's just a personal peeve. Overall, great stuff!
witeaya chapter 2 . 1/6/2012
'Don't struggle bitch, it isn't efficacious!' bit never fail to make me laugh.

fun read
christinaxxyo chapter 19 . 12/12/2011
I really liked the idea behind this story and I think it would be really amazing if you revised it a little bit and expanded on some of your ideas. Still, I think you did a wonderful job on this :)
waitingForRand chapter 18 . 11/30/2011
Cute story... loved it.
becomesilhouet chapter 18 . 12/21/2010
Personally, this story was one of the best reads I've found on here. I wish it was longer, wouldn't mind to read a bit on what happens next with Anna and Warren. Though, something to watch out for next time is typos that were kind of distracting, but otherwise, the characters and story flowed great. Really great job on the story and unique idea!
bubublacz chapter 19 . 11/14/2010
If you are going to publish this, I would appreciate a major editing. For me, the transitions were too fast. Of course, I understood the story just that it seemed like you were skipping on scenes. Although it was funny, I found myself skimming your work. Though, I would feel bad and read it slowly...
bubublacz chapter 17 . 11/14/2010
Oh, moms...
bubublacz chapter 3 . 11/14/2010
Homeless shelter... I could hear his innocent voice while saying that. Very good stuff!
bubublacz chapter 1 . 11/14/2010
What a queer way to start the chapter. But I got intrigued, and as a reader that's very good for you. Very intrigued, indeed... will continue reading on... What a bastard that Simon is! He doesn't want to break up with her so that he'll have someone when his other someone wouldn't like him. Ass!
MiidKniight chapter 4 . 9/9/2010
Now I have no problem with the beginning. Her feelings are made clear in this episode. For some reason it plays in my head like a movie scene.

I'm glad you didn't leave a cliff hanger. It's going to suck having to work with Simon's new girlfriend especially seeing what seems like a big difference in character. (the flowers)
MiidKniight chapter 2 . 9/9/2010
re-gift him. how funny.

You left off the e at the end of route close to the first break.

I really like Anna though she makes me wonder what my roommate does with my things when I go for the weekend. Her voice makes me smile. I like that she keeps going back to thinking that he's going to rob her. She seems normal which is hard to find at times.

I'm very curious as to why he's running away.
MiidKniight chapter 1 . 9/9/2010
That was a very odd beginning. He's been wanting to ask her out? How long had they been dating? I think more background on the relationship is needed to make it seem more complete.

I don't think I would believe he has amnesia. I wonder how she'll take it?
Asdferas chapter 19 . 4/1/2010
Hey! I have just finished reading this story and I have only one thing to say to you: Get It Published-FAST! It really is absolutely amazing.

The characters are well developed, it is mostly realistic(the lifestyles, problems in life, etc. although if I'm honest, I really don't think there are too many naive girls who would let an apparent amnesiac into their home ;p)

The way the story is written...wow. Seriously, as a reader, I felt things for the characters like sympathy and I just felt like I was watching a movie and like shouting at the TV for her to 'forgive him you idiot' because 'it was so hard for him to deal with' and all...not many stories do that to you.

And I loved the subtle humor too. The way you would build up the curiosity and tension and then just say something sarcastic and totally different.

So to sum it all up: get this published. It really is a great story and it would be such a waste to not share it with more people.

lovelovelove

x Shana x

P.S. If anyone dares to give you a "don't waste your time", they are off their rockers ]
Abrasive chapter 1 . 2/2/2010
As far as first impressions go, this one was hilarious. I'm referring specifically to the opening scene - the break-up. I was completely taken aback by the situation, the sheer audacity of her boyfriend to ask such a thing of her! You really pulled it off; brilliant timing. However, it might be a good idea to add more reflection about the incident in later scenes, even if it's only a sentence or two. Either way, I loved that beginning.
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