It is sweet...I felt that the love between Anna and Warren could have been depicted more.

lol..

Aw man that sucks :/ poor Anna

Your writing is rather good

I actually really enjoyed reading that! Absolutely loved your characters and the situations they got themselves into hahah. There's a couple of typos here and there though, and the one thing that did sort of bug me was your use of "ya" instead of "yeah" or something similar. But don't mind me, it's just a personal peeve. Overall, great stuff!

'Don't struggle bitch, it isn't efficacious!' bit never fail to make me laugh.

fun read

I really liked the idea behind this story and I think it would be really amazing if you revised it a little bit and expanded on some of your ideas. Still, I think you did a wonderful job on this :)

Cute story... loved it.

Personally, this story was one of the best reads I've found on here. I wish it was longer, wouldn't mind to read a bit on what happens next with Anna and Warren. Though, something to watch out for next time is typos that were kind of distracting, but otherwise, the characters and story flowed great. Really great job on the story and unique idea!

If you are going to publish this, I would appreciate a major editing. For me, the transitions were too fast. Of course, I understood the story just that it seemed like you were skipping on scenes. Although it was funny, I found myself skimming your work. Though, I would feel bad and read it slowly...

Oh, moms...

Homeless shelter... I could hear his innocent voice while saying that. Very good stuff!

What a queer way to start the chapter. But I got intrigued, and as a reader that's very good for you. Very intrigued, indeed... will continue reading on... What a bastard that Simon is! He doesn't want to break up with her so that he'll have someone when his other someone wouldn't like him. Ass!

Now I have no problem with the beginning. Her feelings are made clear in this episode. For some reason it plays in my head like a movie scene.

I'm glad you didn't leave a cliff hanger. It's going to suck having to work with Simon's new girlfriend especially seeing what seems like a big difference in character. (the flowers)

re-gift him. how funny.

You left off the e at the end of route close to the first break.

I really like Anna though she makes me wonder what my roommate does with my things when I go for the weekend. Her voice makes me smile. I like that she keeps going back to thinking that he's going to rob her. She seems normal which is hard to find at times.

I'm very curious as to why he's running away.

That was a very odd beginning. He's been wanting to ask her out? How long had they been dating? I think more background on the relationship is needed to make it seem more complete.

I don't think I would believe he has amnesia. I wonder how she'll take it?