Reviews for The Phone Call
Aviangel chapter 8 . 4/26/2009
Ah this was great! I can't wait to read the rest! Keep at it!
sara chapter 8 . 4/17/2008
ah! why isn't it finished?
ravenurse chapter 8 . 4/15/2008
when's it going to get scary?
ravenurse chapter 5 . 4/15/2008
interesting chapter, but since you are writing in first person why are you using the mother's name instead of just mom?

"Marilia covered her eyes with her hands and wept."
ravenurse chapter 4 . 4/15/2008
If she was really scared, she would have relocked the door, and if people were in her house that's just plain stupid to not call the police, and she didn't even relock the door after that, either it just doesn't make sense or she's one dumb chick
ravenurse chapter 2 . 4/15/2008
“Selena, it’s your brother. He’s been murdered.

I froze. “Not again.” I whispered. My grip on the phone loosened and the phone clattered to the ground.

that doesn't sound right, like her brother has died before?

other than that good chapter.
NightWolfMoon chapter 8 . 4/10/2008
that's good! keep going! :):):):):):):):):):)
NightWolfMoon chapter 7 . 4/3/2008
pretty good. update soon please!
Le Tranquille chapter 7 . 4/3/2008
This chapter was good! I don't know why but I loved it when you said "Attached to the shadow wsa a pair of feet" I thought that was just a cool way of phrasing that. I dont know if you noticed but the first line was repeated. Good job! But one thing, she could've broken a window even though they were locked. But overall it was really good!
RAND0M-KiDD chapter 6 . 3/21/2008
Le Tranquille chapter 6 . 3/21/2008
It was good! I can't wait to read some more.
NightWolfMoon chapter 6 . 3/20/2008
this is good! keep going please! :):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):):)
View from the Windowsill chapter 6 . 3/19/2008
Very well written, with a few minor corrections this could be even better. I was a little bit confused at first but then I got the plot line. Not exactly scary but good all the same.

O.o.StAr.FoX.o.O chapter 3 . 3/19/2008
so far this is a really great story! i'm gonna try to finish reading it tonight!
theV chapter 5 . 3/7/2008
This is quite an expected. Mom as suspect! Was the hand real? Fresh with blood? I guess it must be or Selena's breakfest won't be down the toilet. But, why didn't she call the policy if it was a really bloody hand?
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