| Reviews for Too close for comfort |
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   sleepies chapter 9 . 5/16/2008 aww...shane is jealous of harry! harry seems like such a great friend to have. tehes |
| earlkgm chapter 10 . 5/16/2008 i liked how you changed the POV...there was some wrong verb usage and some other words wrong but other than that it was okay. :) PLEAsE UPATE SOON! |
| WriterGurl123 chapter 10 . 5/16/2008 I'm glad that he told off Lindsey because now she can leave him alone. |
| Kbelle1 chapter 10 . 5/16/2008 Good Chapter! |
| Kayla chapter 9 . 5/14/2008 I love this story. I really like Lyra and Shane. I am not the right person to comment about grammar, spelling etc since English is not my first language. But I can comment for the plot, the characters and your way of writing. I like how you unfold Lyra's and everyone else's character, chapter by chapter. I like the way you describe every scene and how you are making it so easy for us to identify with the characters, especially Lyra. Great job! |
| May chapter 9 . 5/13/2008 I really liked this chapter. Harry is a really kool best friend anyone could have. I think that this will cause Shane to get all wired up. I am excited to know how Shane is going to feel soon. I think that Shane is hiding his feelings because he is hurt inside but I don't know... you're the writer. I am excited because Lyra is so clueless about how Shane is feeling. Anyone could just tell right off that he is way too jealous because he is giving off signs like he doesn't care but really he does. Thanks... I can't wait to read the next chapters. |
| DreamsOnlyLastForTheNight chapter 9 . 5/12/2008 i love Harry he's seems like a sweet loveable guy shane is totally jealous, so cute! anyways, update soon! |
| inFEARandFAITH chapter 2 . 5/12/2008 I only have one criticism. :) I love the story and characters so far, but I've noticed a lot of confusing tense changes and typos. Try reading what you write out loud. But otherwise, it's great (: |
| LittleCook2008 chapter 9 . 5/12/2008 Well, Never saw that one coming! fab! Somebody's jealous! and we met one of her guy friends! yey! |
| KLAM chapter 8 . 5/11/2008 omg who is it! haha love the story update soon! |
| sleepies chapter 8 . 5/11/2008 great updates...i can't believe that shane really kissed her for the dare. -~ tehes lemme gues...the pair of hands belongs to either shane or mike... |
| Wheresmyprince chapter 8 . 5/9/2008 Aww I really want her to be with Shane update soon. |
| j chapter 8 . 5/9/2008 I luv this story! continue please |
| under the bed chapter 8 . 5/7/2008 Who? Who? D |
| WriterGurl123 chapter 8 . 5/7/2008 Why does it seem like it's one of her guy friends from School? I wonder who it is. |