Reviews for System For Creationism
avery78 chapter 1 . 3/4/2008
"my air caused your lungs to swell like warm balloons

that sang drumbeats as they grew

and knew the Morse code of my walk."

Perfect.
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 2/19/2008
God, this is amazing. I'm always blown away by what you have to say. I love talking about skin and teeth in this; they're such great images/objects to work with. The body as a whole can be shaped into so many fantastic ideas in poetry. I love it. This is elegant and sophisticated, mature. Really nicely done. Keep writing! :)
Porter Daryl chapter 1 . 2/19/2008
This poem is amazing. Verbose and dripping with beautiful phrases about the technological aspects of creation-as mankind would understand it in the modern age. "In my imaginary situations/ my air caused your lungs to swell like warm balloons/ that sang the drumbeats as they grew/ and knew the Morse code of my walk." That is what I call good poetry!