|Reviews for Songs|
| sleeplessblue chapter 1 . 2/20/2008
That was beautiful! I only noticed a couple grammer mistakes. And I liked these lines:
"you smile when you lie, funny/you run when you can't walk" I like it because it gives me a picture of someone who's kind of a coward. (I'm not sure that's what you mean, but I'd still like it.) :D
And the last ones, "Don't forgive me/from the mistakes I've learned/Forgive me when/I forgive you." Because it makes me think of how we don't want to forgive right away...
and maybe we're not ready to be forgiven yet, either. :)
Keep up the writing!