You've certainly got cold-blooded killer down pat, that's for sure.

You are missing punctuation at the end of a few bits of dialogue- periods, I think.

Overall, it is well done and entertaining.

Told you all ready I liked it, and I have the same advice, just watch that you don't over reiterate the issue :) Mild typo though: "her primary career" should be "her primary carer

Bet you can't guess who I am! I am a little confused on why he had to kill everybody, not just get out of their before the police showed up. So that the police wouldn't know his face? That's the only thing I could think of. Other then that, is was very good. He was easy to understand, and not quite what I expected, but this is before what we were discussing right? So of course he would be different. Is the 'her' his lover? He stays with her?

Holy crap! That was by far one of the most violent one-shots I've ever read, and I have to say it was really good.

Hmm. Well I must say, I'm extremely impressed. Not that I didn't already appreciate your writing style; it's just that this is so very different from everything else I've read by you. This represents a certain depth in thought and production I haven't seen so blatantly in your other pieces. It does however exhibit the twisting qualities of your shorts. When I read the beginning I did not expect this chapter to end with a bloodbath-which, by the way, was executed brilliantly, I think-though I suppose perhaps I should have as the tone you set so tactfully at the beginning suggested that nothing good could follow. As far as improvement goes, I don't really have much critisism. I love your style, your dialogue, and delivery and the only things that need to be fixed are typos. There's one in the line

He knew that he had to kill her least he put her through more anguish...

and one in

…wanting nothing more than to take her grieve out on him.

There's another before both of these but I can't remember where exactly. En tout cas, ce n'est pas tres serieux. I enjoyed reading this immensely and look forward to reading an update. Keep up the good work.

Wonderful! Absolutely wonderful! And this should mean a lot considering how much I do enjoy gallivanting around this site flaming vampire stories left and right.(Oh that rhymed)

Anwyay, read my story "Pray Heretic" and you'll see why I enjoyed this so much. We might be thinking on the same level here. When it comes to vampires, there's a fine line between sickeningly evil (aka crude angst) and beatifully evil (aka reflective, tortured victim of circumstance).

Do more!