|Reviews for holy and meteor|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 2/23/2008
I like this.. the imagery is beautiful.. especially in the first stanza.. and the ending stanzas was a beautiful play on words
I might put a comma at the end of the line "you had the coldest gaze"
And also the we at the end.. I'm kinda unsure who the other person is... you have the she but who are you in relation to her? Maybe you wanted the reader to wonder.. ::shrug::
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| a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 2/22/2008
...because running out of time and running from time are really very similar, now that you mention it.
| Written chapter 1 . 2/22/2008
just the right number of lines to make a sonnet, though not the right structure... random observation :)
I love the last two lines. really powerful.
also, "you had the coldest gaze/ but the softest touch". wow. another good line: "alight with alchemy".
another great poem!