ohgodohgodohgod... SO BEAUTIFUL! this has my skow vote, def. :D

thank you for writing this.

what can i say that hasn't already been said. this story is a master piece .you took a simple one shot plot and turned it into something so much more.i really enjoyed how you did both perspectives .it was something i actually wasn't expecting. and the story flowed beautifully . hope you win the skow award for best one- shot you deserve it.

wow. wow. I don't even know what to say. uh, your writing is beautiful. like knock me out amazing wow how many times did you work on this beautiful. the words come out so easy and effortlessly beautiful. um. yeah.

I also love the many allusions. it gives your piece a real... feeling, like its a small story that's just another part of a greater story somehow but I dont know if that was your intention or what. it had a ... mythological feel to it. sort of larger than life.

but it was also very personal... it had a real tenderness. sweet and intense.

this was an AMAZING read. you have every right to be hella proud, is all I'm saying. the relationship you created and the words you used... well, I'm impressed.

I'm sorry that this review is all gushing and run ons, but I'm not going to remember anything I want to say if I wait to catch my breath.

I don't think I'll ever read anything quite so wonderful ever again.

its and you shouldnt change a thing, you really shouldnt, because its perfect. i mean it. i love it.

shouldn't it be: “You make me kinda nervous too,” she whispers back.

That was really good. It had depth and substance without being bullshit and confusing,cause you know how people try to be deep but they sound like idiots? Well you didn't. You made sense and there was even a bit of surprise in there because I didn't realize that it was a think back story and I think that all of the mythology references you put were great. And yeah I liked that story. And I can completely relate to Pen when she speaks about her Dad.

Wow. Just...wow. Really good. And powerful. I loved it.

You've just left me speechless, and I really don't know what to think or say to you. Just reading this got me thinking how real this is, and wonderful the allusions you made are. I think Casablanca, Breakfast at Tiffany's... and My Fair Lady are my favourite classic movie. I'm pretty sure they are, but it's great how you used the two in here. I could practically hear Connor whispering the words to Moon River.

Anyhoo. Good job. This is perfection and I have nothing to critique :)

This is the second time I've read this story. This is the second time I've burst out crying at the very end.

Thank you.

Again.

This was great. You were very descriptive and as a reader, I could feel what the character was thinking.

You got major points for titling it Moon River. I love that song (i think it's very romantic or at least, the score is) along with the movie that it was featured in.

Stunning. Absolutely stunning.

The style is beautiful, and the way you so easily together biblical, mythological and contemporary references with modern personal issues just took my breath away. I even love the way you use profanity.

Gorgeous.

Wow... that was probably one of the most emotional pieces I've ever read. Fantastic. I love how you mixed in the "normal" style of writing you usually read in romances (like words such as chickenshit, douche, sniggers, etc.) and a more formal kind of.. spiritual (?) style. I don't know, maybe I just noticed that, but I liked it. Just everything was excellent. Honestly, I loved it. (:

This is amazing and heartfelt and sincere and god, it's been so long since I've read a one-shot and nearly cried over it. I love the character Connor and the fact that your characterization of him is so sincere and honest. Their love isn't 'perfect' or 'cliche' or invented upon a plotline that forces them into situations together. Ever so real and ever so something that I think every girl can kind of relate to, in some way..