Wow that was intense but realistic. it's scary to think that stuff like that really does happen to young people all around the world. So sick and extremely sad.

what is AFF...?

anyways, that was a really good chapter (and story) so far!

i cant wait to see what happens next.

update SON

ds4eva

p.s. i dont want to sound like an ad, but could u plz come read some of my stuff...?

Sick twisted jerk... argh! (Loved it! -)

Aww... Mommy! - Great chapter!

Sick, sick bastard. God, I hate him already. Such a sick freak. I know he's not real but there are so many like them that reading this just makes me think about all the real Fathers and I get so angry. Great job on making it real.

I really, really like this. The chapters are a bit short but that's cool. I can't believe all the bruises she has. It's terrible but he's wanting to be there for her and that's always cool. Wow, I liked this chapter.

Love how it turned out! - (can't wait to read the next part, lol -)

Love it! -

its really good and quite intense i hope you continue AeroSpyder. Violet seems like she's been abused for awhile.. i wonder by who... be waiting more!

I just love this story. It feels like i'm reading a best-seller i've just picked up in the bookstore. It's enjoyable to read. I love the way the timeline is set-up. Complicated but understandable. Please keep updatinng!

I love it! Keep going, please! :)

Not bad. I think a lot of the sentences tried to get too complicated, though. It might sound strange, but sometimes simple sentences and structure can leave a lot more impact than ones crammed with too many descriptive words. If you tried to vary your sentences better it would make a noticeable improvement to the writing and would make for a more fluid/enjoyable read. This is not to say that your writing is bad though so I hope you won't think that's what I'm trying to say.

There's something about the last thing that the man says to Violet that I just adore. It just sounds wonderful in my head as I read it.