Reviews for This Fire
letyoursoultakeflight chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
Nice ] I like the beat I heard to it ]
emmaliefje chapter 1 . 3/22/2008
Wow! This one is awesome! I really like the rhymes you made! It's so cool! I love the last line! :D:D:D
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 2/23/2008
I like it and I have a bit of constructive criticism.. lol

It flows really well and I like the repetition of around this fire in the first line... I also love the phrase "tattoo heart"

I'd add some commas in... I think that might help the flow a bit.. especially in the last two lines of the second stanza

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burning in effigy chapter 1 . 2/23/2008
really like this

the rhyming is nice and kind of ties into the idea of a fire being very err "smooth" and err.. "one" if that makes any sense

and i especially like the third stanza... symbolic :]