Oh woah...for a minute there I thought she was actually in the hospital. Nice chapter, althought nothing much really happened. I will try to be patient though!

I like it so far, the fact that it starts out at a younger age than most of the stories I've read (and maybe I'm just reading the wrong ones) is refreshing. Twelve is such an awkward age and you made that clear when you mentioned his legs he had yet to grow into. I look forward to reading more. :)

**ques up for cookie**

X] I love it.

I hope you update soon.

PLUS.

I have just seen Darker Hershey's thingie.

And I lolled.

It's blates Darker Hershey is just messing around, so don't take it to heart...?

)

Well I just wanted to say that so you wouldn't feel enraged...if you are feeling enraged, 'cause I saw the review you left on it.

P

And if you find my comment out of order then I am sorry (

But anywho, I do hope you update soon. X]

x

Kim

I found this story in a weird way. I clicked on a story with this same summary, then found the Fresh Prince theme song in it. Then I looked at the person's profile and groaned. That person doesn't actually WRITE anything on this site, just random crap. (FP should delete that person's account-pronto!) Then I looked at the reviews and found your penname, and decided to check out the ACTUAL story. It's brilliant, I'd say. I can't wait to read more! Update soon!

um, concerning the story that has the same title and summary as you:

you both published on the same date so i don't know if you can "sue her ass" as you kindly put it. No, I'm not the author or anything but I saw your review and thought it very rude of you.

this looks like it should be a great story. continue soon. ]

Aw. This was cute. I was a bit confused through: what about his father? Perhaps you could elaborate a bit on that.

But I really liked this! More, more!

Pet cookies? I think my dog might eat it...

~GryphonFledgling

hi. nice beginning. I think you know but some freak has the same title and sum. that you do for a playgerized work just above you. I hope you update soon and you recover quickly from your writers block. ]

I've actually never had a pet cookie, before. How could I refuse? ;) Anyways, the prologue is interesting and I'm curious about the rest of the story. Meh, I hate writer's block, I'm under a really bad one right now. :( Oh well. Continue, please!

Great start. No sign of writers block here. Update please

A good start to a story, it promises to be interesting, do update soon.

Tecna ;)

Yay, new story with a promising synopsis. The prologue is a little short so I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Glad to know you're over your writer's block!

Your first chapter is a little vague, but so are most first chapters. Keep writing and let the plot unfold.