|Reviews for Toilet Water|
| RobanCrow chapter 1 . 3/25/2008
Oh, wow! As strange as the question might be, you make it feel so commonplace among them to discuss it. The cast sounds like such a fun bunch. In the text, I think "then" should be "than", and "where", "were", but I shouldn't nitpick. It's definitely an entertaining read.
| groovacious chapter 1 . 2/28/2008
Ehh I don't know what I'll do. Wait, actually I'll boil the toilet water first, cool it then drink it.
| ecwix chapter 1 . 2/28/2008
Yay! Flash fiction!
I know you probably won't care much since, as you said, you just wrote this real fast to prove something, but anyway...
It's hard for your reader to tell who is talking, and, to tell the truth, I kept thinking that there were only two people actually talking. That would be one thing to improve. :P
I also found the way that Adam posed the question quite interesting. "Incased in porcelain." O.o
But good job! You have good dialogue that sparks interest in your characters quickly.
And for some reason, my fingers feel hyper and want to type a lot. I must restrain them...
| FellowMan chapter 1 . 2/28/2008
yeesh...I wouldn't drink it. it would only be a matter of time before you die either way so why die in disgust?
funny snipit you have there :)