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![]() ![]() Ooooh so mysterious I want more! please update |
![]() ![]() ![]() Can I tell you this is a great fic and I'm glad I found it, but disapointed that it hasn't been updated but yeah anyways love it I really hope you update it though:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is intriguing. first person really give you an opportunity to develop your characters more fully. the one thing that i can think of that (after reading a lot of fiction over the years) is that if you are switching between characters, but weary about re-writing a scene that just happened again in the other characters pov. as in, the scene just happened, and then you switch pov and the second character basically re-tells what just happened, but with only tid-bits of his/her own commentary added. something to watch out for. i'd hope you'd come back to this story, seeing as it's been a while since it's been updated. i'm really very curious as to what you have in store for these characters. so far so good, cheers! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Its a really good fanfic. You got me interesting in it. So I hope you continue! Please? :3 |
![]() ![]() ![]() Whew... good chapter. I liked the duel perspectives on the single event. I also liked the immediate interest with the prince dude or whatever. Ciri I think. I loved how he was immediately stricken by the other guys looks and the last line was priceless. Wonderful! I think it might be wise to reread your work though, just to pick up on the small typos that happen to get skipped over by the spellcheck. I also heard that reading your text backwards is a good way to find errors you wouldn't normally have found. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Haha, no problem with the support. This did seem a little jumbled and I can't tell if the main character, Asin, is a male or female. But... I guess I might find out? Anyway, I want to see more of the dude that he saw in the first chapter. I can't wait for these two to meet. hehe. Anyway, I guess my only advice is to do some editing and rewriting befor eyou post. Just look through it, read it over again and make sure everything is in order. _ |
![]() ![]() More please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked the first chapter. A couple of spelling errors that you can find if you just reread it. I like dhte duel perspectivees though. Nice touch. |