|Reviews for Euphoria when the Bombs Fell|
| ByYourSide chapter 1 . 4/7/2008
I like your narrator. _~ He's got spunk.
And pessimism. Who IS he?
I like all the description, and the way the narrator's personality is woven in with it. The bit about the cars was nice. I thought the whole thing was a feasible way for a world to react when it's about to die.
It was euphoria when the reviewer pressed "submit."
| xEutopiax chapter 1 . 3/8/2008
I'm going to review while I read, so I'll do the grammar and sentence structure first.
-[Everyone saw them coming,] long before impact but far too late for anything productive to be done.
~The sentence is a bit awkward. You might change it to "Everyone foresaw their arrival"
-but they didn’t exactly get [anywhere Thousands]
~period after anywhere
Okay, as for the conclusion: I liked the tone of this piece, you really captured what it would be like if something like that occurred. I like how you had the same sentence at the beginning and the end, it leads back to the point and supports it.