Reviews for Euphoria when the Bombs Fell
ByYourSide chapter 1 . 4/7/2008
I like your narrator. _~ He's got spunk.

And pessimism. Who IS he?

I like all the description, and the way the narrator's personality is woven in with it. The bit about the cars was nice. I thought the whole thing was a feasible way for a world to react when it's about to die.

It was euphoria when the reviewer pressed "submit."

xEutopiax chapter 1 . 3/8/2008

I'm going to review while I read, so I'll do the grammar and sentence structure first.

-[Everyone saw them coming,] long before impact but far too late for anything productive to be done.

~The sentence is a bit awkward. You might change it to "Everyone foresaw their arrival"

-but they didn’t exactly get [anywhere Thousands]

~period after anywhere

Okay, as for the conclusion: I liked the tone of this piece, you really captured what it would be like if something like that occurred. I like how you had the same sentence at the beginning and the end, it leads back to the point and supports it.

Great Work!

Kaiyako K.