I'd love to read more of this girl's musings...And if you're stillwilling to review my work, my novelis called Lurch's Girl. (-:

i LOVE THIS love this, love this. so much.

This was just... amazing :) You have such a talent.

I just love how you encapsulate the running monologue of thoughts in this sort-of letter. It's a bit haphazard, a bit jumbled, but completely understandable. You really are awesome! :)

ohh this was interesting. I usually get lost in these though...not in one shots, in the one shots that aren't meant to be read to understand, but the ones that you have to try to imagine what's going on.

Anyways, it sounded very crisp and real...so I liked it.

~Andy

It's amazing how some writers just manage to get it.

You did that with this.

It was love at first word for me.

My god, I think I love you. All your work is so good and and and...*insert other compliments here* Really great story/confession/whatever you'd like to call the genuisness.

Well, she's very mixed up about this guy, now isn't she?

This is very, very good. I liked how you used personality quirks and built from there. The characters are very real and likable. You're a great writer! :)

continue this

PLEASE!

it was really good and you learn so much from both characters just from reading the one point of view, it's great.

it was funny at the beginning, sucker for popcorn and don't even like it? haha

idk, it's just...i like this for some odd reason

it's nothing special to the eye but it's something you can visualize and connect to, whether you've had something like that happen to you or not.

idk why I find it so fabulous (appropriate word I think..) but it just is

great job!

~toodles~

I love all the things you did to show they liked each other. It kind of reminds me of this one time... Ok, well you don't need to know that.

But it's a great one-shot. It's great that you made me feel that the main character liked him and then all of a sudden *bang* she hated him.

Good Job.

.jealous

Wonderfully written. It appears to be about a girl describing her experience with her ex while judging whether she liked them or not ( not forgetting sarcasm). Very down to earth and great flow, definitely a great read.

-Pedro

This reminded me a little of the poem at the end of Ten Things I Hate About You (which is a great movie, by the way). I really like the style of this piece - it's almost poetic. It probably wouldn't work for a full-length chapter story, but for this one-shot, it puts the reader IN the story. Or maybe that's just me, because the "you" reminded me of someone I know. Keep writing! This is great.

Wow. This is really well done. There are a few tiny suggestions I'd make, but just a little edit-y, nitpick-y stuff; this is a really well-crafted story. Your characters are so freaking REAL! Seriously, I love the way you get across the quirks and little intricacies of the other character, but also of your narrator, and so subtly-I got through about half the story before I realized I knew as much about the narrator as I did about the other person. Especially awesome, since your first line, and the whole story, is about personality quirks. So, awesome job. I'll definitely be reading more of your stuff (because I've got a fun and stimulating two weeks with my grandmother ahead of me... urgh). So, happy writing!

But I wouldn't mind that review. ''

Also, if you ever get around to it, maybe put some sort of page-breaky thing or dash or something before the little author's note at the end, because I read it and thought it was part of the story, and got really confused... -.-''

this was greatly written, it really allowed the reader to get inside the protagonist's head and sympathize.

It was a very enjoyable read.