|Reviews for cycle of decption|
| Vinko Ravindra chapter 1 . 5/7/2010
There is potential here, but I do not feel it was grasped quite firmly enough to ensure its residence.
The whole work has a feel of not quite establishing what's going on; it left me a little confused, trying to follow where this was going. There were also a few mechanical errors, which hurt the poem further in my eyes. If only you took the time to deal with details, it would be something very good.
I would suggest proofreading this briefly, perhaps adding in some further clarifying words, and generally elaborating on what you wanted to accomplish here with the small details that matter so much.