|Reviews for Pixies|
| miscellanea chapter 1 . 5/20/2008
That was really awesome, I enjoyed it very much. The perspective you chose was extremely interesting, and I loved your concept. I will have to check out more of your work...
| yanz chapter 1 . 3/10/2008
I love the repetition in the last stanza, and the rhythm and rhyme is very good. Careful spelling mistakes though!
| Time To Change chapter 1 . 3/8/2008
It reminded me of La Belle Dame Sans Merci, and other poems we did in English. I love the sense of loss and musing. Touching.
| Tranquil Thorns chapter 1 . 3/8/2008
This is beautiful!
I've been meaning to write a narrative about a similar topic, and I think you've inspired me. So thanks for that. (:
It's sad but pretty at the same time. I love your opening line - it creates suspense and kept me reading to find out who 'they' were. Your descriptions are haunting, especially 'To see me choke and watch me dream', 'gnarled grey hands that do not alter'.
A typo here and there, such as 'watch' and 'gnarled'. P
Overall, though, I think you have a vivid writing style and I look forward to reading more.