|Reviews for Drift|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/9/2008
I love those last two lines... theyre beautiful and powerful... the stars imagery and the dust imagery are both really interesting and well done.. I love it
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| 123454321 chapter 1 . 3/9/2008
The first half of this piece is very full of cliched phrases; so much so, that the second half shown out. The ending is beautiful. But really, maybe work on cutting out some of the cliches?
It really begins to get better with the line 'and touching nothing but cold air.' That line completely changes the mood of the poem.
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