Oh, sweetie. :[

This is beautiful, though.

sad but pretty. women should be woman. nice job.

but an ordinary women...woman

I like how the beginning and the end connect... it's really nice.. and all the imagery in the piece is absolutely beautiful... the curtains swimming is her eyes is wonderful and the part about the spot where someone drew out her insignificance was really wonderful

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I like the way you mention drawing and ink and paper. it holds the poem together, even if you didn't do it with any intention.

I really liked it!