| Reviews for Drowning Lessons |
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   nadia the demented one chapter 1 . 7/19/2008 As an avid reader and occasional writer, I find good stories are created through an amazing storyline, aided by complexity in characters and the writing style. I've read mind blowing original fiction before, stories that have the potential to the human mind curious for more. This story was so very insubstantial. While it may be pleasing to the naked eye with good paragraphery, few to none spelling mistakes etc, it was nothing remarkable. You lack the spark fiction usually has. Why? Because I seem to think plagiarised works are ever actually anything fantastic. Yes, that's right, I'm accusing you of plagiarism. Twilight, anyone? Change the character's names, make them look a bit different and put them in a different location - that doesn't mean it's YOUR work. This first chapter was absolutely screaming Twilight, and it's beyond ridiculous to steal someone else's work and call it original. On the off chance, if this wasn't plagiarised (which I highly doubt) then you have no sense of style whatsoever. Your story is bland and barely progresses. As the audience, I certainly did not find myself riveted like I should be. Your writing style may be polished on the outside, but it is not in any way imaginative. It's inane, end of story. Perhaps you should stick to something not so platitudinous. Personally, I don't believe romance and supernatural are genres suitable for you to write in either. Lack of suspense is what deters me from continuing reading. (Not to mention I've read it before.) Maybe your calling is elsewhere. Better luck next time. |
| teardropsONroses chapter 20 . 7/18/2008 this is awesome! And it ends! why? you should...umm..oh...i dunno...write more? soon? please? (i beg) Is Pretty! |
| moira chapter 20 . 7/18/2008 Another wonderful chapter! I can't wait to read what happens next! |
| xiia0moonlight chapter 20 . 7/18/2008 hm, what i interpreted is something about clothes, or mayb toothbrsuh? lols |
| teardropsONroses chapter 15 . 7/17/2008 oh. this is so cute. and yet again i have not made it to the end but i have to go to bed now so i will return (again, i swear) it's amazingly awesome! |
| teardropsONroses chapter 10 . 7/17/2008 wow this is like... the BEST chapter so far! wow! now I'M speechless! it's so good |
| heartxheat chapter 20 . 7/17/2008 Ah! Yes, it does keep me satisfied, although it is a little bit of a cliffhanger type of ending. I do have a few good ideas at who the glare was being sent from though! |
| I Quoth Nevermore chapter 20 . 7/17/2008 Oh man, those last two lines were a killer! So I take it the stalker has found them? Crepy. And this is just so cute/sexy/wonderful. Glad you're going to be updating on a regular schedule. Well, until the next post. |
| teardropsONroses chapter 9 . 7/17/2008 this is really good so far normally i read to the end in one sitting but i'm gonna go to sleep now before i die of exaustion i'll catch up later, i swear it's amazing you have me hooked! |
| teardropsONroses chapter 6 . 7/16/2008 Psst! In a previous chpt, Jill ate some choc chip pancakes her father made for her. she choc. chip. cardboard, or something. so that doesn't really fit with you mentioning that she hasn't had choc. chip pancakes since her mother died 4 years ago. but is pretty. it's good so far. |
| teardropsONroses chapter 1 . 7/16/2008 ooh! this is very cute! i like it you're good! |
| Nodiey chapter 20 . 7/16/2008 Awesome, more please! |
| lostlotus chapter 20 . 7/16/2008 love it... GAH whos the stalker? |
| Hannah chapter 2 . 7/16/2008 I have a feeling this was penned while you were very much into the Twilight Series by Stephenie Meyer. I can't help but draw comparisons - did I guess your inspiration? ;) |
| moira chapter 19 . 7/15/2008 PLEASE UPDATE! DYING HERE! |