Reviews for redemption
Kelsey Rider chapter 1 . 2/28/2009
This is marvelous. Absolutely astounding. I love, love, love the imagery. gorgeous!
Iccle Fairy chapter 1 . 7/2/2008
lovely imagery again, made me smile!
shadow-of-a-trackless-sea chapter 1 . 5/4/2008
interesting, don't quite understand the silver aspect and why it won't hurt her, but none the less i loved the imagery.
creepy kiss on tuesday chapter 1 . 3/14/2008
Pretty. I'm clueless, but pretty nonetheless.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/9/2008
she didn’t seem to notice too much/about where she was... the about doesnt seem to make sense

i watched her from my window i could.. you need a period or a semicolon between window and i

she never looked up; she never looked/down…she only seemed to look out with.. putting down on the new line seemed odd

I LOVE this piece... telling it as an observer is really amazing... and I like how you bolded that second hard and I also loved the ending... it was really beautiful

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123454321 chapter 1 . 3/9/2008
Beautiful ending. Finding redemption in the rain is a good subject; adding personality to it like 'silver' is a good idea.

I don't really like the second 'hard', though. It adds redundancy because the rest of the piece is so straight forward.


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