|Reviews for Meaning of Freedom|
| seventhchords chapter 1 . 4/28/2008
| sunshower chapter 1 . 4/16/2008
Wow, I think this is great too. You're really on a roll at the moment. Maybe I should get to posting up some of my more recent ones.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/14/2008
really interesting... I like how it doesn't really become evident that it's about religion until towards the end, that was nice
The only thing is everything was 4 lines (except the chorus, which was 6, which worked okay) except the ending art which was 3 and 3... that struck me as a bit odd. Nicely done.
| Fractured Illusion chapter 1 . 3/13/2008
SURPRISE! I decided even the non-winners of Review Marathon deserved some review love too, so here I am! :)
"but God’s made us"
I don't really get why you have a 's there after God. Either it's God or Gods. God's indicate possession (Ie: God's Kingdom)
First stanza is very good, because it even had rhyming that flowed well I like the first line too, even if I don't quite understand it. Just a nice phrasing :P
And haha; I was about to tell you "Hey you know this could totally be a song!" but then I see you are way ahead of me with the insertion of the Chorus part. ah well. At least I noticed, right? :P
Nice flow and such, and I like your lines. Subject isn't really my cup of tea but that's just my beef.
Keep it up!