honestly, loved your idea.

loved your summary, too.

the story itself was kinda poorly-written though.

your chapters are really short. i know you said not to point it out, but when i read 'short' i had defined it as probably about 300 words at the very least.

10 words was not what i had expected.

your story would be much better if you had described more, elaborated more, and made your chapters longer.

so, yeah, great idea. not so great of the way the story was written, though.

*i don't mean to sound too harsh. just being honest*

I like it. Short, but powerful.

I feel like something needs to happen, though. I feel like Hunter really isn't the one for her, and she needs to realize that no amount of qualifications and checks on her list can make someone perfect.

Oh, I hope you plan to finish this one day. I need to know what happens. Especially what happens with Nico. It's really lovely - and the list itself is perfect.

Dang, I just fell in love with that guy :P

This is a really interesting story. I had actually seen this around and clinked the link numerous times but, ironically, never had time for it. Funny, though, since it's so short! But you know, I really like the concept you have going for this, and I enjoy the fact you're doing things differently. The chapters may be short, but each one means something and there's a storyline. I've always stood by the idea that if you can say and send a message you want in one sentence, you're a good writer.

I haven't exactly tested that out by going global, but you're a perfect example of knowing what to say in little words.

Anyway. I love Hunter, and I love M. I think both are good for the main character, who's quirky and unique. Maybe even a little obsessed with romance and everything being perfect. Which is fine, because it suits her, but I reckon Nico's the one who'll tip the scales because he's unlike everything on her list. I wouldn't mind him either, but in the modern day and age, suitors like Hunter are A. But Nico also has a beauty that's wrapped in a lot of anger and backstory that looks like it might unravel soon or later.

I don't know what else to say except that I'm hoping there's an update soon!

Where were you planning on taking this? Were you going to let her end with Nico or Hunter? Because personally I liked Nico better. Well since you've hit writer's block maybe you could let Nico and ... did you name her? Wow, if you did I forgot! Well Nico and her could meet each other by mistake or something? Or She could meet Hunter's parents. Or she could find a talking potato! Lol... I fount that funny :) Well good luck with your writers block and I hope I gave some help (: Update Soon! and if possible could the chapters be longer?

ok, i was wrong. lol. ;)

her secret admirer is the one she said no to, yeah?

maybe this will change, but i don't like your main charactor... she's way too picky and a huge hypocrite.

she learns something from this, doesn't she?

lol. "She tells me to be a good one."

that's right... only your best friend would tell you that. :)

she's so picky... but i guess we all are in our own way, yeah?

No offense, but...these couldn't even be considered chapters! The "chapters" are more about the review responses than anything! It only took me one minute to get to Chapter 9. Wow. It'll be a record if I finish this entire "story" in less than 5 minutes. -_-

The plot...I pretty much gave up after than the 4th chapter. It's just waay too short. Make them longer. It feels more like a scraps and scraps of sentences, really. I mean 10 words could be considered short, but I think you just gave "short" a whole 'nother meaning!

Holy frick! I understood what they said. I guess my Spanish classes are paying off. :P

Sweet conversation, by the way.

Hey there. :)

New reader here and I can't help but love your story and the plot. Reminded me of the time I made my list of 'prince charming.' Haha. Someone matched my record and I ended up with him. But now I learned to add one more thing to my list so that I won't have my heart broken again. Cliche? Yeah, I think so. :)

Anyway, I'm dying for your updates. :D

And I think small chapters adds interest on the story.

Confession: Long chapters gives me eyes strain. :)

Love,

Hime.

Was this in real chapters or have you deleted most of it to try and publish?