hey..i think it's okay but it lacks

creative words...

it's too...straight forward..?

idk..but that's what i think..

Wow. I am so sorry I overlooked this story for as long as I have. I love the simplicity and the narration and all of the characters (even if I keep on looking for flaws in Hunter and kind of dislike Nico for disrespecting his mother because I'm Asian and anal) and if I continue praising this story there will be so much improper use of the word "and" that you'd want to shoot me. Sorry for the run-on sentence and the parentheses.

I like Nico so I'm hoping for a Nico x main character ending. ) But then either way I love the story so far! D

Take your time to update. )

wow congrats on stanford that's AMAZING!

and the chapter size is unconventional but i don't mind it.

i think its actually kind of refreshing and different. great job!

ohgosh. I love this! (:

I just came upon your story today, and I love it. I've read in your author's notes that people are complaining about the length, and I wanted to let you know that it doesn't bother me at all. I think the short lengths of the chapters make this story unique. I love it and can't wait for you to update.

:)

FINALLY! I think it's been about a yr since an update. Loves it!

Congrats on STANFORD! Holy guacomole. Happy New Year, by the way. Keep updating!

Ahh, It's been so long!

I remember when my friend first showed me this a year or two ago.

I'm glad to see an update.

hey,, i like your list.. and i love hunter... one question though,, is the girl ever going to get tired of having her perfect boyfriend or is that such a spoiler question? ]

whoa.. hunter..

wow.. stickers?

Hello,

Congrats on getting accepted by Stanford. This is a good story, but the nameless main character is kinda bugging me. Also, the chapters are short, it makes for an easy read but sometimes, it gets irritating.

All in all, a great read.

i love the way the girl thinks and acts... ]

Hi there. I think that you have a good story right here. It's very original, I'd say, and I'm always looking for original things. The chapters were short, and easy to read which is good. For me as a new reader, of course. Right now there's nothing I would hate more than reading a forty chapter story with around 50 words in each chapter. The concept of writing the story as vignettes is very clever, and original again.

But along with the good-here comes the bad. It gets unrealistic at times. For instance when she started to have a lot of boys who showed an interest in her-I could really feel myself rolling my eyes. Because that's what most writers do with their main characters. They create a lot of people to admire the main girl/boy thus creating "Mary-Sues/Gary-Stus)

There's also another thing that strikes me as odd. Is this story actually progressing anywhere? In your summary-the main girl, this un-named character is supposedly unhappy when she finds the boy who fits in her list. But unfortunately, I don't even spot a hint of this going on as of currently.

The last thing which I am bothered by-is your care for reviews. It almost appears as if you don't care about your story . . . just the reviews. Now I know that reviews are always a good thing, trust me. But I don't know. Occurs to me that you're rather obsessing about the clicks you get to your story, the review count, the story-alert . . . etc. Which is irritating for me to observe.

That's all I have to say about the story. I hope that it actually leads somewhere soon. So please update when you can.

Miss. Neptune Heart